OMFG. Ember seriously has problems. I really like hr character. She is ver complex. She is abused, does drugs, has a huge secret, a maniac is after her (lucius), and she really likes her best friend. And I thought I had problems. *shakes head* Hmm, I have a feeling that Remus will save her and be her knite in shining armor. Aw, it is so sweet that she took Damian(sp?) under her wing like that. When will she notice Remus's 'furry little problem'? Also, why doesn't Remus smell her furry problem? Or is it that only Ember can do that? I can't wait for the nest chapter. I would still prefer it if the chapters were a little longer. Pleqse update SOON!! 7/10
~RoseAuthor's Response: thanx! and im workin on it now and trying to make it as long as possible. =) Report Review
I like it. It is good, though the chapters are a little short for my taste. I love Sirius and Remus (and James). Ember seems very interesting. Grrr, I HATE her father already! 8/10
~RoseAuthor's Response: So far the next chapter is about half a page longer. Im trying to see if i can get it any longer than that but im glad you like it. =) Report Review
Still lovin it, but I just have a few suggestions. Narcissa was a Black, not a Lestrange, and when you were talkng about Damion you said he was a fifth year, and I think you meant first year. Keep writing!Author's Response: thanx 4 the tips and im glad u like it =) Report Review
Dude, that's intense! I like it, you should definitely keep writing!Author's Response: Thanx! glad u like it! =) Report Review
Good story! I really like it so far! Please update soon!
10/10Author's Response: thanx! im workin on the next chapter now...and im glad u like the story. =) Report Review
write more soon!Author's Response: thanx! =) i should have it ready later. Report Review
its good. A little more detail would be ok, but I like it.
awesomeAuthor's Response: thanx! =) and ill totally add more detail. Report Review
I've said it once, and I'll say it again: you've got an awesome idea here. I would work a little on the flow of it (something we could all do :]). Also, I think you were talking about Narcissa, not Narcissus. Great second chapter otherwise!Author's Response: thanx! i was wondering if i was spelling it right. thanx. =) Report Review
Very good!Author's Response: Thankies! =) Report Review
wow. This is a really well written story, and I'm interested to see where it will go. It seemed a little violent, but I guess that's what had to happen to set the story up. I think this is going to be a really cool story! Keep it up! 10/10!
xoxoAuthor's Response: Haha! yea that was the only other way that i could set it up. i'm glad you liked it. Thanx =)! Report Review
i think it is really good and i cant wait to read the next chapter. also who r ember and aarlynAuthor's Response: thanx =)! Ember and Aaralyn are just original characters. it took me ages to figure out wat their names were gonna be. Report Review
pretty good!Author's Response: thanx! =) Report Review
OMG! poor Ember. =[. great story so far though. Can't wait to read more so please UPDATE SOON!Author's Response: Thanx! im workin on chapter 2 right now. =) Report Review
Not bad for a first fic, it was a little graphic for a first chapter though, other that that I found it pretty good. 9/10Author's Response: yea srry bout tht. but thanx. =) Report Review
sad, depressing, but morbidly interesting Author's Response: thanx! i tried. =) Report Review
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