Brilliant :) cannot wait for next chapter. Report Review
crazy and confusing! Report Review
Good story. I'm dying to see where this goes. Lily seems kind of cold. I hope you're going to make her nicer. Please update soon. And maybe you could check out my story. Report Review
Wow! Very emotionally charged! I feel so bad for James. By the way, Princess of Wales? That's creative. Just one bit of criticism though. Sometimes it's difficult to tell who's pov you're telling the story from. Maybe you could make that a bit clearer in future chappies. Report Review
wow it's so sad, poor James. I want to read more though. Pretty please? Report Review
I love it. Poor Lily. Is James even going to believe her when she tells him she's pregnant. This is going to get messy. Report Review
its an interesting plot, but the character jumps are too fast and not at all clear - even just saying the character's names at the top of each section could help. Also perhaps you could have developed the characters a little more and fleshed out the first chappie - making the characters more lifelike and making the actual story easier to read...
its a decent story though... good luck with itAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for your comments! Maybe I will put their names in. But I might not get to it very soon. Report Review
its kind of a quiet chapter but i like it!Author's Response: Thanks. The next chapter will be more lively. I think... Report Review
it is so cool!! ;}}Author's Response: Thank you! I was hoping you liked it. Report Review
i really like this story! is there like a catch? or a real reason why Lily did it? please keep updating! very very good story!Author's Response: Thank you! And there'[s definitely a catch... Report Review
Pretty good plot idea. Just the fact that you keep changing the point of view makes it VERy confusing. I actually didn't realize that it seemed like you didn't like Lily, cause I couldn't understand who was talking half the time.Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm sorry you found it so confusing, it all makes sense to me ;)
Next chapter is the same so... sorry... Report Review
LILY SUCKS! NOO! How could she do that to James, that little cow! James is suicidal. D: I am actually thinking about writing a story about James being suicidal. That'd be cool. The Avada Kedavra bit was great too, thank god for Sirius!
You should feed Lily to some man eating sharks! Heehee. Tip: Don't malke everything all right too soon, depressed state matters are more interesting to read! Ciao!
And update soon!
~ZazuliAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review! And don't worry, there's lots of depression coming next!
P.S. Don't you just love Sirius? Report Review
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