very good job, doll (: Report Review
Few things. First who is that song by? Second, I think you should break up the paragraphs so it makes it easier to read. If someone new is speaking but their dialog should start a new paragraph. But other than that, I like it. It's cute and I think we all can relate to it in a way.Author's Response: The song is by Josh Groban. Thanks for the tips. Report Review
8/10 Author's Response: Thank you very much. I really appreciate it. I changed the whole storyline. It is not so sudden now. I also turned it into a song fic also. Report Review
Your story was pretty good. It was slightly sudden though. I think you should at least give a little more on how they got together. But your story is still pretty good.
Could you read and review my stories?
9/10Author's Response: Thank you. I know it was somewhat sudden. I was writing and not really thinking. I thought it was good but after reading it to myself, I thought it was rubbish. The next story that I have posted is not really sudden. It is a story of how self-mutilation brought very close friends together after the person who cut themselves told the other person how they felt. It should be a better storyline. I feel it will be. Report Review
awww thats so sweet i really loved that ist sooo on my fave list you have to write more!!!Author's Response: Thank you. I wote another story. I am still waiting for it to be validated. It is dark this time. I will be writing some more romance stories. The story awaiting validation has romance in it. Report Review
nice. Report Review
gud 4 d first shot !!Author's Response: Why, thank you very much. I really appreciate you leaving me a review. Report Review
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