This is good so far. Report Review
Great loved it hope you can put next chap. up soonAuthor's Response: Wow thanks. I'll try to as soon as possible. :) Report Review
Great start, keep it up pwetty pwease?Author's Response: I promise that Chapter 2 will be up soon, but after the holiday seasons are over... it's a huge stress.. Thanks... :) Report Review
I like it but why do thay all have hazel eyes???
WHy do thay mostly have dirty blond hair??? Well i Like it any ways. Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Yeah I have a tendency to go overboard with the hazel eyes and dirty blonde hair for my characters. lol. Anyway I'm glad you like it. :) Report Review
Wow...That was really good. Keep on writing more. LOL. I really loved it. Author's Response: Thanks. I'm trying my hardest to write Chapter 2, but sadly I'm starting to develop a writers block. :( I'm glad you loved it though! :) Report Review
I liked it but please, please, please update soon.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I am currently writing Chapter 2 so hopefully it will be out soon. Report Review
Not bad for your first fic! You might want to work on your transitions though, it's a bit choppy. Also, make good friends with your thesarus. (I know I have.) You used the word "popular" a lot. Last of all, you may want to be a bit more descriptive. What does Roxanne look like, you know?
On the flipside, being a Jersey girl myself, I'm loving your plot. Seven kids? WHOA. You've earned yourself a fan, indeed.
~ToriAuthor's Response: Thanks. Yeah after I posted the first Chapter I realized that I didn't descirbe what Roxanne looked like. Oops... I'm planning on doing that for Chapter 2. And I'll stop saying popular as much. Thanks for your imput and I will try my hardest to do better for Chapter 2. Report Review
This is a very good start off for your story and I can't wait to read more.Author's Response: Thank you sooo much... I'm in the process of writing Chapter 2 now. Report Review
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