YOU CAN'T END IT LIKE THAT! I WANT TO KNOW MORE!!! Report Review
Hahahaha! :D "All the cute ones are fucking psychos! :D Report Review
Intersting, I dont not see at all how hermione and salazar fell in love so quick but since its just a fanfic it was fun. And *rawr* for the end of chapter 6 and begining of 7 lol Report Review
This was... horrible. It went too fast, grammar and spelling was out, and there was really no plot at all. It was way too OOC.. Ugh Report Review
Oh, criminey. I wonder how this'll go. Report Review
i need to see how they react anyway cool Report Review
lol. Interesting ending. Report Review
why would you do that you have to write a squeal or some thing you so cant end it this way it geting to good
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oh my god u cant end a storey with that cliffhanger. u have to keep riting! great storey by the way.Author's Response: thankyou :) Report Review
Whoa! That was unexpected. Is there going to be a sequel to this? There should. This story was good. I was depressed when saw it only had eight chapters. But I loved it anyway^_^ Although I'm kind of curious; wouldn't time be all kind of weird or effected in some way if she gives birth to Salazar's child? I'm critizing you, I'm just curious. Author's Response: thanks for the review! Report Review
Totaly great loved it.Author's Response: thanks :) Report Review
Amazing I simply love this unique fanfic ! i love it so much !! iwant to know what happens next!Author's Response: ha! thanks hun! *hugs* Report Review
wow...how the hell is she gonna explain that??Author's Response: *smirk* Report Review
this is going to be harsh, but i think it's warranted. there's really nothing worse than reading an interesting story and then seeing misspellings and wrong names. It's St. Mungo's, and damn has an "n." honestly, i didn't get any farther than that because if you can't take the time to spell-check your story and check the names to make sure they're correct, I can't take the time to read it.Author's Response: i'm actually working on editing this story now. It was the first story i ever posted and i know it's terrible.
I do spell check, i do! i just must have missed those....
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NO SEQUEL *SCREAMS* COME ON!
HERMIONE DOESNT EVEN GO BACK 2 TELL SALAZAR OR SOMETHINAuthor's Response: *cough*
i'm not doing a sequal because i currently have two other stories i'm working on that need to be finished first. When i finish, and if i come up with a plot bunny i will write a sequal.
not yet though.
thanks for the review hun and i'm glad you like it ( which, judging from you're reaction you do) Report Review
make a sequel! one where likle, salazar comes for her or she goes back for him but finds he left... i think itll be good!Author's Response: i might right a sequal eventually. not now though, i'm working on two stories at the moment and don't have time to start another! thanks for the review hun, it's really appreciated *hugs* Report Review
hmm blonde hair doesnt seem right for a murderous dark wizard i get the feeling salazar isn't a dark wizard i this fic at least not yet.Author's Response: your'e right, his not a dark wizard yet! Report Review
ooohhh!!! this was a great story!! i really liked it! and you cant leave it there without writing more! please please please write a sequel!! about hermione and salazar's baby! theres so much you can do with it! i love all your stories by the way! :) you are a really good writer!Author's Response: oh, thankyou so much! i'm not sure if i'll do a sequal or not, i have two stories i'm working on now, and then i need to edit this one, because i can do better. after all that, i'm not sure mabey...i'll have to think about it! Report Review
That was a really good story! But I personally hate cliffhangers. You should so write a sequel!Author's Response: oh, i absolutly love them! ^_^ i'm not sure if i wan't to do a sequal or not, not now anyway, i have to many other stories to work on first! Report Review
Please do write a sequel because I want to know what happens nextAuthor's Response: that makes two of us.... ;p
seriously though, i honestly haven't thought about it! so, sorry no sequal until i get a plot bunny! ( if i get a plot bunny)
thanks for the review though! Report Review
Pretty good so far, but I don't like all the swearing. But then again, that's just me. But I do think that it would be just as good and you might get more reads if there was less cussing. Anyway...good start!Author's Response: thank you. Yes when i edit i think i will change that, but anyway!
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I love it! Are you planning on making a sequal? *puppy dog eyes*Author's Response: oh...no... sorry, but i have too many other stories i need to start and finish!
thanks for the review though! Report Review
That was...unexpected! Is there a sequel?
Author's Response: hehehe...and sorry no sequal in the near future! Report Review
I like your story. The one thing that is bothering me, thought, is that you keep calling it St. Mudgo's...it is St. Mungo's. Originally, I thought that that was the reason that they went to the wrong place, so fixing that might make your story that much clearer. Otherwise, good job!Author's Response: oh...yeah i'll definetly have to fix that!
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Okay, how about some CC first? ^.^The first and the foremost things I would like to tell you is describe things a bit more. Pick anything...the surroundings, the Great Hall, Hermione's dress...but describe it properly. Secondly, although I loved how you portrayed Salazar, Godric and Rowena, I didn't like Helga in this story. She almost sounded dumb. Why so? Helga Hufflepuff is the founder of the Hogwarts and it sounds highly unacceptable that she would so confused. Other than that, I guess there's nothing major to point out except some little spelling errors you made. Just remember in the future that you always make the mistake of spelling "we are" as "where" ;)
So, now that the CC's over, I'll dish out the things that I liked. Although I never imagined Salazar to be blonde, I liked the change. Hehe. And I loved his and Hermione's relationship. It was so sweet that they both fell for each other and Hermione had the courage to leave as well. The ending just caught me off guard. Hermione, pregnant with Salazar's child?!? Woah! But I like it. If perhaps someday you wanna write a sequel, you can do it easily, right? Since you left an open cliffie for a supposedly new story ;)
I also liked how you portrayed Salazar. He reminded me of the Salazar in my story. The only difference is that my Salazar isn't romantic and yours is. Hehe. I have read stories where authors make him bad considering that he was a Slytherin and could talk to snakes but I am glad you didn't write him like that. I am sure that he was a nice guy before something happened to trigger his hate for muggle borns.
Your writing style is good as well. I could actually imagine them in my mind as I read your story. I was worried they wouldn't find a way home. But I am happy they did. Hermione seemed out of the character in the course of this story since I never imagined she would sleep with someone like that and because she would be the one who would be more worried to go home than Ron and Harry but it all worked out well and I have no problem with that. Overall, a good read. I enjoyed it and I like the short chapters. I read it approx half an hour :) Keep up the good work and try to improve more *thumbs*Author's Response: oh, thanks for the CC! yeah i know i need to work on my descriptions, i'm trying really hard in that area! you're right i did try and make helga sound dum, i'm not really sure how i feel about this now, originaly i just wanted to add a funny element to the story but now i'm not sure i liked how i portrayed helga...
the only reason his blonde is because i requested a banner and it came back with him blonde! ha, so i changed the story to make him blonde. i actually imagin him having black hair!
i like his and hermiones relationship too! it was the hole plot to the story!
ha i'm so glad the ending stumped you! i wan aiming for a good one! the ending actually didn't come to me untill halfway through writing, but i imediatly liked the idea!
i'm not sure if i could do a sequal, just because i don't have a plot bunny yet, but i sure left myself wide open for one huh!
i liked how i portrayed salazar too! i wanted to turn the founders story on it's head and make him actually likeable instead of being mean! * shrugs* i guess i just have a thing for slytherin guys, draco, blaise salazar *shrugs* what can i say! ;p
i'm glad you like how i write, that's so nice of you *hugs*
yeah hermione is a bit ooc but *shrugs* i don't know i like it!
last of all! thanks soooo much for this absolutly fantastic review! i appreciate it very much hun! *huggles*
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