Ooh! Evil Pansy - always fun to write hehe.
I've got the sequel to Hush up - I can't message anyone on this site - it's driving me mad! So I thought I'd let you know. Please write more evil Pansy. It's awesome! Did you like Deathly Hallows? Report Review
Hi this is Wink from the Forums. What A great job! The entire thing worked well- how Malfoy crosses over and then as to pay for it at the hands of his wife and the Dark Lord. It was very good keep it up!Author's Response: Hi Wink! Thanks for the review! Report Review
I'm resisting the urge to go "OMG!". That was amazing! How you portrayed Pansy, and how you made Draco a good guy without all of that OCC-ness that is so hard to avoid. The song fit perfectly, too. What a great one-shot! You sure know how to write a battle-scene, and you do it brilliantly. I mean, the way you changed from Draco's POV to Pansy's after he was dead, it was so subtle I didn't even think of it until after, and still I got it. Wow. Author's Response: Thank you so much! I was nervous about the battle scene, but I'm glad you liked it! And to think this was written in about an hour after I was challenged! Report Review
This is great! Well done. As I'd previously said in the challenge thread, I've never heard of this song. Just a few things- the formatting was a little annoying and I'd definitely change it if I were you. Also, you have to put a disclaimer for the song, don't you? Anyway, it was great and I really liked the story, the whole "I never loved you" concept was great. Well done. 9/10 and on to faves.Author's Response: ohh, you're so right about the disclaimer! i'm gonna fix that now. surprised the validator didn't catch that. and i'm working on getting the format fixed too. thanks for your review! Report Review
oh my gosh. this was good. and im not just saying that. i mean, your descriptions were fantastic, and i only lament that there is no more! i also enjoyed that you had pansy is a main person. i love pansy's character. there are so many possible choices, and directions a writer can take her. i personally make great use of that in my stories, one more apparent than the other, for now. and im glad that you chose to make her evil. for some reason, there is something good in knowing that if the major hotty of slytherin house had to go good, then at least the major ugly of slytherin house didnt! and her character was..well, well done...
however, there's something funky with your layout, and readers might get a little turned off by the strangeness of it. so you might consider going back and fixing it.
i'm a beta, and, i have not seen your profile, but if you have not written any lengthy fics, i would be more than happy to help you. i am available for helping people just proofread their stories before submission for validation, or i can help with ideas, and putting them down the way the writer wants to. please consider it. my email is firstname.lastname@example.org
allyAuthor's Response: wow, i was stunned to see i got a review with only 4 reads! that's rather unheard of, at least for me. and a lengthy one with something to say as well! *spoiler alert if you're reading the reviews B4 reading the fic!* Yeah, my first Pansy fic. and my first time killing Draco off too. I found this a bit difficult because of the challenge. Perhaps I should put a description of the challenge in an author note.
And my formatting, it would be awesome if you could help me out! It's something funky with the submitting form HPFF uses. keeps telling me I have to add breaks in between my paragraphs, then adds a bunch itself. hmm. I'll email you about it though, maybe you can help me out with it. thanks again for the great review! Report Review
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