So your whole story has been good. Though I haven't always been happy with it. But I never left reviews before saying what I would change because you obviously wouldn't go through all that trouble to change it. But this chapter is an exception. I actually really liked this chapter, and loved the whole Marauders getting angry at Lilly. I was actually enticed and my mouth was slightly held open in surprise. But I was hoping you would carry that out. And you didn't. Lilly should have pushed them off and walked away sadly as they either came down the stairs, or started apologizing to her. Than the readers could really be held there with anticipation. Because 'Oh no! Lilly's angry at her true love!' That's just my opinion. I know, it's a strong opinion, but that's who I am. I'm sure you have this all planned out and are going about how you want it to. GinnysMuggleFanAuthor's Response: Thank you for the review! I completely understand what you are saying because I often feel the same about the stories I read. I will do the best I can to make you and my other fans happy. Report Review
this is amazing! love ittt! You are amazing at this! 10/10Author's Response: Thank you! Yay! I love 10/10! Report Review
WRITE MORE NOW! I AM COMPLETELY HOOKED!Author's Response: I will work hard over Christmas break and hopefully find a way out of my writers block. Thanks for the review! Report Review
I'm so glad Tyler broke up with Lily and got together with Lindsey! Now everyone can be happy and Lily can get hooked up with James!Author's Response: That is exactly my plan... or is it? Mwa-ha-ha. I'm sorry, I just had to do that for effect. I hope you continue reading! Report Review
Kara is downright HILARIOUS! I LOVE IT!Author's Response: Thanks! I love my origional characters because they all have a part of me in them. :) Report Review
this is really good! One question: are you aiming for readers to like Tyler or not? You describe him from Lily's POV as "a cool guy; nice, good-looking, smart, and sweet." The Marauders, on the other hand, hate him. Personally, I both hate him for liking Lily and think he's sweet.Author's Response: He's supposed to be a bittersweet guy. In the end, you are supposed to like him and if I ever finish this thing you will find out why! :) Report Review
This is really good, BUT TYLER CANNOT BE HEAD BOY! JAMES IS HEAD BOY! IT SAYS SO IN THE BOOKS! Other than that, though, it is really good.Author's Response: Yes, I have come to realize my mistake in this, however, I have a plan. Do not fret; all will be well. Thanks for all your lovely reviews! ~Ashley~ Report Review
"... nice chapter! I wish.. nothing" :)) There I left a review, happy?Author's Response: Yes, I am very happy! I love reviews and the people who give them!!! Thanks for the review! ^_^ AshHa Report Review
I'm going to keep this short... I LOVE it! I don't know how you do it but please *big brown puppyeyes* don't stop writing and update really quick ^^ grtzAuthor's Response: Aww! Just because of the puppy eyes, I'll try to update soon! Thanks for the review and I'm glad you like my writing!! Report Review
please get lily and james togetherAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm working on it. AshHa Report Review
i'm enjoying reading this story. i can't wait to read more. what's going to happen now? will u update soon please?^_^ 10/10 Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: That is exactly what I'm planning on doing. After a looong leave of absense, I'm really into the story now. Thanks for the review!! Ash Report Review
hippopotomonstrosesquippedeliaphobia (I can pronounce it too!) a real word? Great chapterAuthor's Response: Yep, it means the fear of long words. Ironic, huh? Glad you liked it! Ash Report Review
this chapter is great but u do know James got Head Boy not other person, right?^_^ 10/10 Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: Yeah, but it will all be fixed soon... Oops, I might have let on a little too much there, but I'm not taking it back! Thanks for the review. Ash Report Review
Nice start for their first day back :D I wonder what'll happen to Professor Carl, though, since he's teaching defense. Oh, and, this is just me being a little picky but you spelled St. Mungo's wrong. Great chapter otherwise =)Author's Response: Thanks for the review and the advice. I truthfully had a brain fart when it came to that word. I'm glad you liked it!! Ash Report Review
Filler chapter. Humph. You didn't FIX it! Plez fix it? For me? :( -CaitlinAuthor's Response: I promise it will be fixed...In, let's say...five chapters-ish! ^.^ Pwease don't throw a cheez-it at me!! ~AshHa~ Report Review
Humph. Not that I didn't see it coming like a big ol' cruise ship with flashing neon lights, but still...gr. Well, I only have three words to say to you: Fix. This. NOW. -yourveryANGRYwritingbuddy P.S. Looking past the complete AWFULNESS of this chapter, it was pretty good...Does that even make sense? Well, even if it doesn't, (which I don't think it does) I think you can understand what I mean.Author's Response: Yes, I can get what you're saying. I am sorry, but it was too good of a chance to ignore!! I suppose you'll be sort of happy when you read...later on... ~AshHa~ Report Review
So I noticed all of your reviews for this chapter got erased. I just thought I'd give you one back. Great job! -CaitlinAuthor's Response: Thanks, Caitlin! This review makes me so happy after reading the ones you later game me... Sorry!!! ~AshHa~ Report Review
Duhn duhn DONE! Good job on this chapter! So that's the whole "Sirius+blond" thing, huh? By the way, I don't like that "Philip" dude. At all. He needs to back off James's girl before I (or James himself) throw a bat bogey hex at him. Did I mention I don't like him? Anyway, once again, good chapter. Mine is still in the validation queue. Update again! Soon this time! -CaitlinAuthor's Response: Ya, that's the whole colored cheese thing. I tried to get you to understand that it wasn't just some blond bimbo, but you seemed set on it. The whole Philip thing will turn out to be a smaller part than you think (or, at least, that's all I have for it so far). Don't take that as the final verdict, because I change my mind WAY too much. Anyway, thanks for the review. I'll update soon (I hope?). Can't wait to read your story, when it's validated. AshHa Report Review
YES I LOVED IT! but it is the last chapter! exelent, i can't wait for more!Author's Response: Tanx for the review. Can't promise on a quick update -or validation for that matter -but it'll be good (I hope). AshHa Report Review
I love how you broke lilly and tyler up without anyone actually cheating! LOL.Author's Response: Tanx! I couldn't hurt Lily like that, and Tyler is an AWESOME guy, so he would never cheat (Unless he had a ton of butterbeers that James paid for). Even then, he wouldn't want to purposely hurt Lily. And, how many of those guys do you find? Couldn't ruin it, just couldn't. AshHa Report Review
Hey! Thanks for writing somthing a lot better than the usual fan fiction. It is really nice to read a prequel. Keep it up!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you like what I'm writing! Don't worry, I'm not planning on stopping anytime soon -unless I hit another MAJOR writer's block. And, I certainly do not plan on doing that. AshHa Report Review
I thought that JP was head boy in his year but i think you being well YOU can think up somethingAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review. Yah, James was head boy, but I kinda lost it when I was writing. So, I might think of something, later, but I'm liking Tyler right now. I belive that he is doing a good job as HB. AshHa Report Review
dun, dun, DUN! this was a good chappie. frustration, conflict, and LOVE! can't wait for more! wow, i haven't been on the sight for quite a while. four, five months maybe? i should probably get to work on my next chappie good job! Diamond out!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I know how you feel, I went forever without being on this site or updating, and guilt got to me. Yep, you might want to update soon, before an annoying person at your school bugs you about it... Just kidding, I usually do the bugging... Ashley Report Review
Ashley! NO NO NO! BAD LILY! BAD THOUGHTS! She needs to get them out of her head! Anyway, good chapter. Update soon! -CaitlinAuthor's Response: Told you you wouldn't like it all that well! I'll update ASAP, as always. An idea for the next chapter is forming in my head, so there's a good possibility that the next chapter will be up before Christmas! Ashley Report Review
it better be a good next chapter or eles!! just kidding. (P.S. I LOVE CHEESE) (P.P.S. Awsome chapter!)Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it! I guess I like cheese... Not that big of a fan, sorry. ~Ash Report Review
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