and i loved the lenght of it
i really do like long chapters and im looking forward to how Hermione will save draco from his father that git father of his! Report Review
that was definitely an interesting chapter
and i cant wait to see what happens next Report Review
oh my gosh poor draco
that was an interesting first chapter i liked all the different views Report Review
I just found this story today, and am quite enjoying it! You really described Draco's feelings and pain in such a way that it felt real. I love that Hermione is so empathetic, and how their relationship is growing.
OK, now for the not nice part - while I love the story, it can be hard to read sometimes, due to missing words and grammar problems. One thing that I see, is the use of homonyms throughout - for example, "hart" for "heart", "soar" for "sore", etc. I'd recommend that you find a beta, or at the very least, re-read and check for such things before you submit. You're a very good story-teller, and such errors distract the reader from the beauty of your words.
I really like your poems, and look forward to seeing more of them! Update soon... Report Review
I love this story so so much! Draco is so great in it! Well done!!! please update soon we all need more nice sweet sexy sensitive Draco!!! Report Review
I love it!
I just cannot get over how amazing it is! It is most definitely one of my favorites. Author's Response: tnx a lot! this really gives me courage to keep writing since i'm in a totall writers-block :-s
Kanya Report Review
wow long chapter. It was great. A little clique or whatever but nice. I like Hermione giving him a second chance and him covering her with a blanket was really sweet :) The biggest problem with this story for me is Lucius beating his son up, I know part of the plot, he's an evil man, Draco doesn't want to be like him..blah blah blah. I have this problem a lot, most stories have Lucius as the terrible man Draco really hates, and I'm over here waving my little banner supporting a loving in their own way relationship between father and son. Now, this was an intersting line:
'And no matter how strange the combination might seem, it was totally whole.'
lol- and what exactly does 'whole' mean? I read it, did a double take, reread it and laughed.
Poem was short and well written, i really liked the last line 'For I do not exist' When I first started reading it I thought they were lyrics and then it seemed to short to be a song, so I read your A/N (I usually skip them while reading a story) and then I was like 'oh..wow.' and I just had to reread the poem and marvel at your poem writing abilities :) I suck at poems myself so I'm very impressed.
Overall pretty well written, a somewhat generic plot, but it was still interesting.I sort of tuned out at the dress describing part but other than that it captured my attention.
Have a great day, filled with ideas and words, and smiles, and happiness, and yeah I'll stop now. :) ByeAuthor's Response: hey! tnx a million for the amazing review! this really helps. yeah i know that the horrible father-son relationship is kinda clishé and stuff, but well yeah, it's my first fanfic so it's just the easiest way... (hehe srr, small excuse but never the less) you have a point in saying that everyone loves their kids in one way or the other but can't show it... point is that sometimes people simply aren't capable of giving love... and that is what i want to show...
as for the "totally whole" thingy... yeah well. it kinda means that even though it seems like a totally absurd combination of different sorts of dances it all fits together perfectly... it makes one perfect system... it is complete... (i don't know how else i can say it hehe :-p)
about the poems, tnx a lot. probably more will follow in the story... all my own i hope
Kanya Report Review
and again, i love it! of course: i read it before :D
and i must agree with shadow danzer: your poem is great!
we really should get to making our collection of poems together!
love you so much, kanya!!
lasairiona Report Review
OMG!!! i love it. ur poem is good to. PLEASE msg me when the next chapter is up. i relle lyke it. ur a good wrighta. Author's Response: hey!
tnx a lot! i'll let you know when chap 4 is on
Kanya Report Review
well, you know i love it!!! hehe!! :) both chapters are great.
love ya girl
(dikke soen)Author's Response: yours is great 2!! love you 2 girl
(SOEN ;-p) Report Review
Great beginning, it's really well written. I can't wait to see where it goes! Report Review
i like it so far. update soon please. Report Review
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