Ok, so I've read your other fic, Where do Your Loyalties Lie.. and the sequel and i loved them both.. your writing was impressive.. so i decided to give this fic a try.. why did you use the same fighting scene with Ginny and Draco as you did here? why, oh why... i have to say, its somewhat ruined the experience for me.. I'll keep reading, because I've already started this and I don't like giving up on things halfway simply because i dislike something about them.. but I am, as my name says.. Disappointed.. Toodles :|Author's Response: Well I know it was kind of lazy of me but although I'd come up with the idea for Where Do Your Loyalties Lie before I wrote this, I didn't think I would ever write it so I used the idea of that scene in this story. When I did end up writing WDYLL, I wanted to use the scene in the context I had originally thought of, and I was using a different site at that point. I'm sorry I did, especially as it ruined this for you, I hope the rest of it made up for it.
Thanks for reading all my stories though I really appreciate it :) Report Review
i really liked it. but did you want this to fit into canon? because im not really sure james and lily would trust peter to be secret keeper if he had tried to kill her in school.Author's Response: Yeah, I meant this part to deviate from canon, to make the ending more interesting. Otherwise everyone knows what happens.
Thanks for the review! Report Review
aww i loved it really
its really really cute
i love the sirius/oc part
and everything really
keep it up(:
katie Report Review
will sophie and sirius get together and what will happen to peter (not that i really care do i) but yeah love the story the whole sophie and sirius thing is really good hope james and lily have a sort of happy ending
bye Report Review
The end was good for james and lily what happens to the others???
Author's Response: Sophie and Sirius are happy as well. I may add an epilogue at the end to finis it off, so, keep an eye out for it.
â€˜Maybe,â€™ James said, softly, â€˜I got sick of girls only wanting me because of my looks, or because they think itâ€™s an honour. Maybe I want someone to love me for me, and not for my image. Someone who thinks of me as an equal. Maybe I want something real. Maybe you should grow up and want it too, before itâ€™s too late.â€™
Perfect I almost cried. ohhI love James in tjis one and Lily also ...
Author's Response: :D Report Review
That was truly a wonderful ending. :)Author's Response: Thank you :) Report Review
Aw, it was a good chapter albeit a little rushed. It was lovely and long though, which I enjoyed, and I think you should be so proud of the fact that you finished it. :]
The way you mixed the two couples was lovely and the end part with Lily and James was one of nicest ways that I've seen them get together, it just seemed so genuine and action-y.
The parts with Peter were great - most stories leave him out and I admire you for writing him. The action parts were probably my favourite bits of the chapter. :]
I definately think you should do the Remus/Livee one-shot ;] hehe, if you do I will be here to read it :D
I really liked the story - sorry it took so long for me to review ;] You're a great writer and if you write anything else, I'll definately keep an eye out for it :DAuthor's Response: Thanks so much. I am kinda proud of it, even though I didn't finish it as I'd have liked to.
If I get round to doing the Remus/Livee thing, I'll let you know. Report Review
I am so incredibly sorry that I completely missed these updates. When I saw your review I rushed over here to read it :D Sorry it took so long so long for me to get here though. ;]
Amazing chapter, as always. I love the way you interlink angst with romance almost effortlessly and I love the way you write Sirius- just how I imagine him. And the way Sophie was goading him was very well written :]
I really liked the ending, despite the fact that her parents have been killed by Voldemort. I guess it makes things better for Sophie that she's got somebody to lean on. ;] *clicks excitedly onto the next* :DAuthor's Response: That's ok, I only updated it today. :) Report Review
LOVED IT! James threw the nearest object at him â€“ Sirius. THIS IS REALLY FUNNY!!! 10/10Author's Response: Haha, thanks, I'm glad you like it. Report Review
oh my god! that was so good!
i know that the rating onley gose to 10 but if i could i would give you a 99.98Author's Response: Wow, thanks :D Report Review
My! My! I'm so sorry about your Mom. I hope she's all right. I've wondered where you've been for so long. So, are you going to continue writing fanfiction for now or are you going to take a break or quit permantly? I"m so sorry again, but the chapter was quite good despite the rushing.
LIndsey xoxAuthor's Response: Yeah, she's almost back to normal again. And I don't know if I'll be doing any more; maybe. Thanks :D
x Report Review
poor Sophie =[
when is she just going to allow herself to love Sirius again?? (or for the first time...) great chapter can't wait to read more!
Blackheart09 Report Review
I loved this chapter. And I can't wait for the next chapter. It was awesomely amazingly perfeclty good.
Lindsey xoxo Report Review
I can begin to tell you how happy this chapter made me.
so I wont :]Author's Response: It made me happy too!
:D Report Review
lol, awsome chapter!!! cant' wait to read more! later for now
Blackheart09 Report Review
Shut up. And why donâ€™t you ask Sirius yourself?â€™ - â€˜Because Iâ€™d prefer to look at you than Sirius.â€™ I loved those lines :] In fact, I liked the whole chapter.
I loved the little chats between the Marauders especially the one between Sirius and Remus. And the way Remus was staring at Livee was so cute! Sirius loves Sophie :D That's really adorable.
Haha, I like cliffies and the one on the last chapter was a good one! Good chapter and I can't wait for more :DAuthor's Response: Thanks :D
I didn't get a chance to sumbit the next chapter until today, but I'll do it now. Report Review
Please, please, please update! I love this story!!!Author's Response: Thanks!
The next chapter will be submitted tonight or tomorrow - I'll try not to get it rejected this time. Report Review
Bah! Like I deserve it. That was wonderful and I'm actually excited about this one. It was fantastic and I did love that little cliffie of yours not matter how evil it was. I do enjoy writing cliffies myself. ^_^ Anyway, I think the chapter was fantatic and I love you too. :D
P.S. I emailed you back ;)Author's Response: Cliffie's are great!
Thanks :D Report Review
Yay. I really want them to kiss. It would make my day if they did. Although I won't know because I have no more chapters to read *is very sad*
Youâ€™re not naÃ¯ve. Youâ€™re male.â€™ that was my favourite line in this chapter. I love Remus, he's just so sweet. I hope he gets his girl, :]
I love the dialogue between James and Lily and although I've probably said it before, I like the way that you write the Marauders. They're not too perfect but they're amusing all the same.
The Sirius/Sophie is sweet too. I really like Sirius/OC's and Sophie seems to be a good OC at the moment. I'd love to know more about Livee though ;]
Because, Lily, I love you in spite of those things,â€™ He whispered, â€˜In fact, I love you because of them.â€™ - that's a beautiful line. If anyone ever said that to me, I'd be theres for life.
All in all, I really like your story so far. I shall look forward to an update :] Author's Response: I really appreciate all your reviews; along with LovelyMioneWeasly, you're my favourite reviewers!
And the next chapter should be up soon. It's taken a while because I stupidly got it rejected twice, but I think it'll be ok this time *crosses fingers*
I'll check out your stories when it's not midnight... I really need sleep right now. Report Review
Oh, I feel so sorry for Remus. :[ I want him to have his own girl *hints* and everyone to stop using him. I feel sorry for him that Sirius has a go at him although I can totally imagine Sirius doing that. I loved the bit when he was on his own - I think his thoughts were very Remus-like.
As James entered the Charms room, Flitwick actually fell over - I liked that line. The Sophie/Sirius bit in the library was cute - I think I would like them to get back together :] Sirius is adorable.
â€˜A clinically insane one if she chose to willingly study with you,â€™ Remus muttered. - You write Remus very well. His dry sense of humour is great.
And onto the next :]
Author's Response: Remus does have a hard time at thi point, but it'll get better for him, I promise :D
Oddly, the Sirius and Sophie thing is partly based on my life. The bit a couple of chapters back where Lily lists things about James wa kind of based on the same guy that this happened to me with.
Anyway, I love Remus too, so I'll make him happy at some point. Report Review
I like the Sirius/Sophie drama, although I'm not too sure about Sophie... she's very sneaky and I don't like what she did to Remus. I love Remus, you see.
I'm feeling sorry for Sirius as well, although I probably shouldn't be 'cos he cheated on Sophie in the first place. â€˜Hey kids, having fun?â€™ - That made me laugh.
The notes between James and Sirius made me chuckle. James, Thankyou. Sirius. p.s. Hasnâ€™t anyone told you that sarcasm is the lowest form of wit? and Sirius, Donâ€™t be ridiculous, sending howlers and making fun of fat people is the lowest form of wit. James
Good job :D Author's Response: Yeah, Sophie does seem a bit sneaky at the moment, but then her personality is to be irrational like that. She'll pay for it later...
Before I begin, did you know it's all in itallics? It doesn't bother me, I just wondered if it was meant to be like that :]
I really liked the way that Lily listed everything that James liked. I've read it quite a few times, the other way around where James lists everything he knows about Lily and it was original to read. I thought it was adorable.
Remus smiled and lay down on the sofa, â€˜Who will lighten the hearts of students and strike fear into teachers when weâ€™re gone?â€™ He mused, staring sadly at the ceiling. - I liked that line - it was very Remus-like and it just made me smile.
I loved the way you made Remus kiss Lily - it was very original, as was your game of truth or dare. You turned what could have been a very cliche thing into your own. Good job.
â€˜I just give up, Moony, I give up on Evans.â€™ - I want to scream no!! :] James in this story is truly adorable. * clicks on next chapter*Author's Response: I noticed the itallics thing while I was uploading it. It was very annoying, and I tried for ages to get it normal but in the end I just gave up. Sorry about that.
I'm glad you thought it was original, I was worried about that section being unoriginal, and I almost cut it out, but then I thought it was important to show Lily felt guilty and whatever. Report Review
I like long chapters ;] And that was very good. I liked the little twist and turns in it. I'm surprised at Pettigrew though especially as it diverts the story from canon slightly and I can't wait to see where it goes.
The conversation between James and Sirius was very well written. I think you have them in character well, in my opinion, and I liked it.
My favourite line was; â€˜Peterâ€™s found some friends that arenâ€™t ignorant idiots,â€™ Lucius sneered. Sirius pretended to look around, â€˜Oh, I canâ€™t see them.â€™
And onto the next chapter :]Author's Response: Yeah, the Peter thing was partly because he slows down the plot if I include him, but him abandoning the Marauders is very important for later on.
Terms of Service
categories & genres
short story collection