i dunno wat else to tell u bout all ur stories xcept that they r gr8...pls write more...ive realized that a few of ur fanfics hve been left incomplete, so pls try to finish them one at a time, and hurry! cuz ur readers want more of ur enchanting stories!!Author's Response: Thanks, I have never been so choked up before. I am thrilled you love my stories so much. Report Review
You're following Romeo and Juliet, aren't you? Although I don't like these types of stories, I think this was okay. You might want to try to show more emotion and description. Other than that, it was great. Keep writing and keep up the good work. :)Author's Response: Yea, I'm following the famous romance tragedy. Yea, I realized when I posted it, there was more detail in the beginning, then there was in the end. Don't worry you'll love it in the end. Report Review
Hey! This was good! I see Romeo and Juliet in here! Always a fun thing to experiment with! One thing of criticism! In this part:
“Sirius!” Remus calls out as he runs and gives him a hug.
“Hello my friend,” Sirius smiles as he hugs his friend James as well.
“Hello. What trouble have you been causing down here?” James smirked at Sirius’ question
You switch from past to present tense, which can be confusing. Overall, its very good and keep writing! I like it very much! Well done!Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to tell me. I'll go through my story and fix that. Report Review
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