Sorry hun but it wasn't a wow-er. C/c--You could have definitely expanded on it and made it a ton longer. also there wasn't enough fluffy, romance-ness in it. Finally Walking in the Air doesn't really tie in with the story, I'm not quite sure how it fits. Maybe if you made it longer and more detailed it would help.
Don't take this c/c personally just remember it as you write your next fic and if you decide to, revise this one.
Much Christmas Love ~ K

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ill bear it in mindo!!

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Lol! Gr8 story but WAY 2 short! me want more! lol
happy xmas! =)
P.S. I agree, Ron IS a dimbat!!!

Author's Response: thanx finally some advice from you lol
merry christmas


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Ahhh, that was so sweet. And I'm being completely serious, that is seriously one of your best one shots ever. I love the last bit, "Of course you dim bat!!" Reminds me of me. Anyway, your writing has definately improved a lot (under my guidence, only kidding) and I absolutely loved this story. So thats about it.

Merry Christmas

dreamseeker

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merry christmas everyone!!!

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Wow. Um. Interesting. Is that a song or something? Oh, and in the first sentence it should be wandered not wondered. =D

Author's Response: Thanx for the review! i'll change it straight away lol =D

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haha, the story kind of short and boring but i enjoyed the lyrics on the way. you could have made it longer and put more action in it.
(:

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wow

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