Ah this story is very much up to your usual standard of excellence. Much darker than your others that I've read, but still great. Kind of depressing I have to admit, but I like it. I'm usually not into reading Harry/Ginny fics, and obviously I didn't realize that this was one before I started, but I think you did very well with it. Poor Ginny though. And Neville. That's so sad... Author's Response: Thank youuu. You're too amazing, really. =] Report Review
Nice little story. Horrible ending in a good but evil way.
Would have been even a better twist at the end, if it was someone other then who we we were expecting. "Okay, Dean" or say people from a different house.
But I like this.
Author's Response: Okay, so I feel wicked stupid. I was reading your review and I wasn't paying attention and totally thought you were reviewing a different story. So I was like, "WHAT are you talking about?!" And then I used those two brain cells I have to figure it out, haha.
Anywaysss, enough of my major stupidity. Thank you very much for your review, I agree it could have been better. I'm working towards improvement, it's just taking me a a while, heh. I'm glad you liked it though, thanks again for the feedback.
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Jess, you know I love your stories, but you have got to remind me only to read them when in an angsty mood- cause goodness knows they always get to me! Excellent job- you leave me wanting more, as usual.
I do have one bit of constructive criticism, and it's just for a typo. In the paragraph about her smile you wrote:I brushed a lock of ear out of her angelic face and tucked it behind her ear. Might want to change that...
Other than that, it was an awesome story. Comeback: go, set, launch!Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad that I still have readers after being gone so long, it's really comforting. And I appreciate your criticism! I didn't even catch that one! Lol, I don't know where that came from... Anyways, thanks again, really, it means a lot. :] Report Review
brilliant, as always.Author's Response: Thanks so much! :] Report Review
If this is your comeback, what an excellent re-entrance. This was just wonderful. Full points in all areas: grammar/spelling, plot, emotional development, everything. When I first began the story, I thought it would be Lily/James. And while Harry as the protagonist is an excellent twist, he does seem ever so slightly out of character. He seems a bit too much like James. Overall though, an excellent story.Author's Response: I appreciate your criticism so much. Ahh gosh, thank you! I worked really hard with the grammar and whatnot so, thanks for noticing that, too. Report Review
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