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Review #1, by TomFoolery The Witching Hour

23rd January 2007:
Ok, before you think this is a flame, I assure you that it is not, but what I will say about it might surprise you. I'm having a difficult time deciding if it's extremely well-written or extremely badly-written. Present tense stories usually make me recoil and I immediately stop reading when I find stories written in the present tense. But for some reason this one drew me in and before I knew it, I was finished. This is the first thing of yours I've ever read, so I'm not sure what your style is like. But just because I hold a bias against stories in the present tense doesn't mean you've written a bad ficlet.

I think what I loved so much about the story overall is that your syntax and diction flow together well with the story. It starts out at the beginning with reflections on the past, keeps the story text in the present tense, but at the end jumps to a glimpse of future tense, giving it that well-rounded 'complete' feeling. It's the same thing you did with the title: very well-rounded, brought together at the end and the beginning. It was a nice touch.

I did find one sentence that didn't make much sense to me. At one point you say " James filly draws silent and stares at the table," I'm not exactly sure what you were going for there. Finally? Fully?

Altogether, it had a sort of brief, stream of consciousness feel to it and I liked it. It was not quite my typical story, and a bit short for my liking, but I think overall you did fairly well.

Author's Response: Thanks. I'm glad you liked it even though it is a bit different. I'll make sure I'll fix that typo, thanks for catching it.

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Review #2, by Y B Normal The Witching Hour

25th November 2006:
I LOVED YOUR STORY. It was amazing i wasnt expecting things like this but i absoultyl love it!

Oh and by the way this is self assured.

Author's Response: Glad you liked it. Thanks for the awesome challenge.

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