This is awesome! I really like it, and you should write more! :D Report Review
I REALLY like your story so far but you could use a little bit more details. Hope you finish it. Report Review
its magical you know i like it.
do some more i like the plot.
and make it more romantic.
but not much romantic ok!.
i like it, you could make a award winning book like j.k rowling's.Author's Response: Thank you sooo much.... lol thank you! lol... You are really lovely ..
I am working on the rest ... But my pc blew up, so.... it is proving somewhat tricky... I will get some more up as soon as I can.
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Ok, now, just to reassure you, I am not stalking you, but just trying to convince you to write/publish faster :) So, WRITE MORE NOW YOU BUTT-WIPE..sorry, MoOdSwIInngSSS XDXD
-LlamaAuthor's Response: hey thanks sooo much for the reviews i am working onposting some more but my laptop blew up so i kind of lost what i already had written, which was up to chapter 13 but i promise to have another chapter up within the week
Um-k, your writing is progressively getting better, your spelling is the only issue, but there you only miss, oh, I don't know two words a page, so, anyhwo, WRITE MORE NOW
-LlamaAuthor's Response: My spelling has always been particularly horrendous, haven't been able to post on this in ages, been sooooo busy with other things, but I will try my very best to get something up as soon as is possible. Thanks for the review
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Ok, now I really liked this chapter better than the last one, and I can't come up with any criticisms...thorry :)
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Your writing talent amazes me, I love that way that you describe things so well, but most all, that you're so through in what you write. PLEASE write more, this is awsome work!
-LlamaAuthor's Response: Awwww Bless you, you flatter me so! Much love xoxox Report Review
wooow!! - you are an amazing writer! - and soo cute
I loved this line :"But why?’ Lyla whined, suddenly aware that her white socks had now turned orange." lmao
Your work is so fun to read - I'm very intrigued ^_^
One thing though, why they're parents pushing them together so much I wonder...hmmm...? - I'll guess i'll have to read more to find out - love it kristy :D Report Review
Oh, look. More insanely annoying spaces.
Leon: I agree. :|Author's Response: I am really really sorry i am not doing that on purpose the system keeps telling me my spaces arent big enough and redoing them for me
I will have a go at changing it.
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The huge spaces inbetween are insanely annoying.
Please stop it. Report Review
That was so cute!
Update soon, you awesome writer! :PAuthor's Response: awww thank you love,
Next chapter is on the way
written and everything
kristy xxx Report Review
I really like this story! Lyla's character is very interesting, and she seems to mesh really well with Draco. One thing you could do is make your transitions between events/moods etc. more smooth; give us a bit more insight into what is going on inside the characters' heads before moving on. You don't have to write it that way, it's just a style thing, but I'd like to see it! I love the idea for this story, and I love your characters! Please keep writing!Author's Response: Thank you, very much for the review.
I seem to be having a lot of trouble getting reviews. I love Lyla as well she is like my alter ego, I can see what you mean maybe include moments of contemplation. I will see what i can do.
The next chapter will go up as soon as the staff come back from their christmas holidays.
Thank you again
I love it!
Post more please!Author's Response: thanks lovie
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I love this story!Author's Response: Thank you for my first review it will not stop here the next chapter is in the Queue as we speak so keep a look out thank you. Report Review
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