This was a great beginning, introducing both the main characters and presenting a bit of a back story on both. Tom seems to be written in character, which is great. Your OC, Maura, seems to be written well too. Your details are very interesting and draw the reader in, keeping them until the very end of the chapter. Their interactions towards each other read very creepy, so far. You've done a great job showing just how much not only her but also the other Slytherins detest Tom. I saw/read no grammatical errors or misspelled words. Well done.
~Celtic~ Report Review
Wow, what an amazing story! I loved it, I really enjoyed seeing Tom have some human characteristics without it being unbelievable. I'm really interested to see the sequel Report Review
This was such an awesome story. It's so hard to find a good (and realistic) Tom Riddle story but this was perfect! I really hope you decide to write a sequel. Report Review
Loved your story and the magical realisme, though i can't imagine Voldermort giving up his magical heir or her.. great story! Report Review
Every word possible has been previously said. I couldn't help but wish it ended differently, but it ended almost exactly as I felt it would as it neared the end. I must say I'm glad she didn't end up with Abraxas because far too many stories end like that. Report Review
I just spent one whole day reading this story. Literally, from morning to night. It was nearly four in the morning till I finally finished. I just couldn't stop reading. You did Tom's character superbly! As unsatisfying as the ending was you stayed true to his character because I think all of us hoped that he would of course tell Maura he loved her and that they would live happily ever after. But of course we all know Tom never has his happy ending. In saying that, you have shown us a realistic story which at the same time portrays a side of Tom never seen before in the hp series. 10/10!!!
And yes to the sequel please! Report Review
SEQUEL OR ELSE I WILL KILL YOU
I LOVE THIS STORY LIKE CAZY Report Review
I am very upset! I loved this story beyond belief but there was no happly ever after!:( maybe sequel will do that? Report Review
FREAKING LOVED THE STORY! i dont know how many of the last hours i spent reading this story.
Amazing. Seeing the side of Voldemort everyone has craved to see yet him still retain old traditional characteristics genius!
and Abraxus never expected his character could be developed to someone so awesome but he is awesome!
yes, SEQUEL SEQUEL SEQUEL.
I loved it, i was a bit upset when Maura and Abraxus didnt end up together but still brilliant! love love love
SEQUEL SEQUEL SEQUEL Report Review
This is one of those stories where, no matter how hard you try, you'll never find one as great as it was. I was on constant edge. You did an amazing job at keeping the plot moving, as well as living up to the difficult task of sticking to Tom's character. And, while I found the ending unsatisfying, it was a pleasure to read.
P.S- I really hope you post a sequel up. Even if you think it's not good enough, post it anyway. Your fans NEED it! Thank you. Report Review
I just read this whole story in the last day and a half and it's fantastic :) Report Review
I was so hooked on this I stayed up the whole night reading! It's so addictive and my favourite hp fanfiction ever! and the first the depict tom riddle faithfully.I would love if you wrote a sequel and a chapter of tom's pov.
Thankyou :) Report Review
OMG this is the best story I have read in a long time! You most defiantly should write a sequel...this plot is just to good! ;retty much this whole chapter had my heart pounding, it was so suspensful! It just showed in the end that he really did love her in his own special way, but I didn't think it was really out of cannon. Bravo!
Please write a sequel soon. And a chapter from Toms pov would be amazing!:) Report Review
AAHH i keep reading this story again and again! best fanfiction i have ever read.. ever. haha im soo happy i found this story, i absolutely love ur portrayal of tom. they ending, yes was disappointing but it definitely makes sense along cannon lines. i read about some people asking for you to write a sequal? i dont know if you would be interested but write a new novel instead! i personally think that sequals ruin the first book. but anyways just keep writing, your amazing and good luck in the future Report Review
I have never experienced such a whirl wind of emotions whilst reading a story, I hated him, loved him, regretted it, then forgot why. You truly have a gift of writing, the end, although wonderful, personally, I didn't like it, but only because somewhere deep inside, I wanted Tom to truly love her, which he did, but enough to drop everything. So bravo for letting the entire story play out exactly as it would have Tom ever loved a girl. Thank you for not letting it turn all mushy and lovey.
It would be amazing if you could do a sequel to this story.
If I could rate this 100/10 I would! Report Review
oh no that little shaky love bris=dge just lost a couple of planks. Report Review
Oh my gosh. i don't even know how to tell you how much i loved this story! i don't even have the words to explain how intense it was! You made old Tom perfectt, the reader couldn't help but both hate and love him. that was amazing! 10/10! Report Review
i loved this story!
SEQUEL ? (: that would ah-mazing ;D Report Review
this was amazing I mus say and I think you know this but I found this story on another websight and sent them a note that this was your story not theirs anyway i loved itAuthor's Response: Hey, thanks for the review, and thanks for looking out for me! I did see that someone had posted this on another website, and I sent an email to the site but so far they haven't removed it :( I'm glad that you loved my story! Report Review
So I was cruisin around fanfiction[dot]net when I found a story called "Riddles of the Heart" by "sticknstones". So I read it and it sounded pretty familiar. So familiar in fact, that I most certainly think we have a failed case of PLAGARISM! They didn't even bother to change Maura's name :( sad people.
Just thought you would like to know.
PS. Absolutely love the story. Fo shizz.Author's Response: Hey, thanks for tipping me off, I can't believe that sticknstones just copied my story word for word and tried to pass it off as her own! I find it really dissapointing and disgusting when authors try to take credit for something that they did not do. I've reviewed "her" story and alerted fanfiction[dot]net of the plagiarism. Thanks for lookin out for me!
P. S. I'm happy that you loved my story! Report Review
Absolutely loved this story! It was sad but it was kind of a given that it wouldn't have a happy ending. A one-shot from Toms pov. would be interesting, so I hope you make one (:
xxAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review, I'm so glad you liked the story (even though it had a sad ending)! I will definitely try to post a Tom one-shot soon :) Report Review
BRILLIANT STORY. I loved it .Author's Response: Thank you, I'm so glad you loved it! Report Review
Wow, a great story. I was really kind of hoping she could change Tom, but I guess this is one story that just couldn't have a happy ending... oh well. I can definitely see this as being just an extension of canon, it's excellent :)
10/10, brilliantly written and I can't remember seeing any technical problems with the story at all.Author's Response: Thanks, I'm so glad you liked it! I'm really happy that you can see this story as an extension of canon, thats what I was going for (which is why it had to end the way it did). Thank you for the lovely review! Report Review
i know it wont count for much...and i know its probably very late to get this...but i loved this story it was wonderfully written and i would hope that you would make a sequel. (secretly i hope that Tom can get Maura back in the magic world) And i think that Selene gets a story for herself as well.I hope to see you continue the story!!!Author's Response: Every review counts, and it's never too late ;) Sorry for my late response too! I'm so happy that you enjoyed the story, and a sequel is hopefully in the works. Thank you for the review! Report Review
wowow this is amazinng. soo hooked. and i love that she doesnt give in to him and is scared of him- like thats how it really should be.Author's Response: Hey, thanks for the great review, I'm so glad that you liked it! Report Review
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