I gotta tell ya, most people get Draco's character completely wrong but you somehow pulled it off. :) He was evil in a sense but he was somehow being polite in a bad way, if that makes sense. I really liked it and I'll be reading and reviewing your chapters henceforth.
My favorite quote: "I mean, truthfully speaking, if it wasn't for people like us the heroes would never exist." -It's like the words came right out of my mouth! I say that so many times! I'm a lover of dark and evil characters, I can't help it. haha. I'm always saying if there were no evil characters, the heroes wouldn't be heroes.
That's awesome. :)
~Animic Report Review
Ah, i LOVE your wit and sarcasm you use in this :] This is brilliant, Please carry on the story (= xx Report Review
I really like this. Many people beileve Draco was a bad person because of how he acted but you told it from Dracos view and that most of the time he had no choice but to be the 'bad guy.' Please get some more stuff up. I think this could turn out to be a really good piece. Report Review
Loved it!! I'veloved the way Draco was funny in his usual sarcastic/sneering way.
Update soon! Author's Response: Thanks a lot, I'll try my best!! Report Review
I loved this first chapter & really like the idea of telling the story from the "dark" point of view.
Fab beginning!! 10/10
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I may not like the song, but the lyrics and how you've used them are excellent! Immediately, you feel lke you know this character, you feel sympathy but also feel her helplessness. This is a very clever beginning, I'm adding to my favourites 10/10Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much! Here's a cookie *hands cookie*. Wow, I'm so honoured! Report Review
OMG this chapter was so good i found it amusing as well Draco is so rude and funny lol i can't wait for the next chapter and i agree with Draco in the fact as if u would hug Snape!
Lil lily71 xxAuthor's Response: Thank you!!!!!! Lol, yeah, who'd want to hug Snape? Even if he is one of my favourite characters.
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I love it! i love the song and u wrote everything out so well, i can't wait to read the second chapter.
Let me ask you, if you were born into a Dark family and raised to believe that Muggles and Muggle-borns were filth, would you not have faith in the same principles? If you were abused by your father and ignored by your mother, if you knew everything you got was merely to make you shut up, if you knew that nobody cared for you, would you not be bitter? If you were thought vile by everybody only due to the fact that you were a member of a Dark family with Dark parents and part of the Dark house, if you were uncertain of who your real friends were and who was just using you to gain power and money, if you were considered to be your father and never given a chance, if you had no confidantes, if you were beaten every time you showed emotion or slipped up, if you had so many feelings bottled up inside you tell me, how would you feel?
I liked that bit because it displayed Draco's feelings.
anyway off to read second chappie
Lil lily71 xxAuthor's Response: Thanks so much! Actually I included the song because the prologue was quite short. . . . . .haha. No, I'm just kidding, I chose it because it fit well and I love the band.
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My name is Megan, too, lol.
Anywayz, it was a great chappie, and I can't wait until you update!Author's Response: Lol. . . .cool, isn't it? Haha.
Wow, thanks so much!!! I will try to update as soon as possible. Report Review
This is awesome, I can just see him standing there as he says all of this.Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much!!!! Report Review
I love the way you've written Malfoy's voice here. Very in character, yet not completely evil. I can just imagine him sneering as he says (or writes) this. The lyrics were fitting as well. Excellent work so far! :-) 9/10
PS. Thanks for reviewing all those chapters of my story. I'm glad you liked it. What do you think of the last chapter?Author's Response: Thanks so much!! Yeah, i pretty much had the emntal image of him as well as I wrote this. The lyrics were Simple Plan's - I love them! It'll probably be they're songs mostly that I use throughout the tory.
Actually last night my dad was after my life for the computer so I couldn't read it. I'm off to read it now.
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This is really good. Sentimental, and displaying the character's true feelings. I will be checking for updates. 9/10Author's Response: Thanks so much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I feel really happy :). I'll try to update ASAP. Report Review
I like the different point of view. I can't wait for more. Author's Response: Thank you so much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Report Review
~*~*~That..was.a.fricken.awesome...prologue! I'm going to be adding this one to my faves! I give it 11/10! I'm hooked on it already!~*~*~
~KeiraAuthor's Response: Thanks so much!!!!!!!!!! *turns deep red* I feel so good. Thanks again!! Report Review
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