This "story" is immature, badly written and not a shred of anything redeemable
I am sorry for being so cruelly blunt but you came no where near capturing any of my interest Report Review
the whole stories just wrong. completely out of character. for well everyone. just very very weird Report Review
I COMPLETLY agree with harrylovehermione
i was disquested and replused! becides that was sooo out of charater!for all of them. escellially making the sweet innocent little girl die at the hands of harry! it was horrible ! Report Review
ok that was stupid,dumb and i hated it Report Review
I just want to say that I think this story is disgusting. what you have written is completely repulsive. having a man kill his own daughter and then wife only to continue with suicide... well why would anyone in their right mind want to read about something so depressing? I sincerely hope that the rest of your imagination is not this morbid and dark. does reading this story make you happy?
I am sorry if you think i am being to harsh, but i find this story offensive and disturbing Report Review
This is quite possibly the most SICK thing I have ever seen done with Harry Potter! There are topics you should NEVER write about. This is one of them. The boy who lived would NEVER turn on a friend, would never betray the ones he loves, and unspeakably evil to think he would harm a single hair on his own CHILD'S head! The Imperius Curse is a cheap ploy for this. People can tell when other people are under it!There should be a new Warning: Harry kills family members! DO NOT READ THIS, EVER! Report Review
1) Hermione's eyes are brown.
2) The only friend Harry has lost up till now has been Cedric Diggory (and they didn't even know one-another that well.)
3) Harry and Ginny didn't start seeing one-another until their 6th year.
4) Harry Potter had gone through a tough life. He lost both of his parents when he was very young, got his curse scar shaped like a lightning bolt on his forehead, moved in with his only remaining relatives, his Muggle aunt, uncle, and cousin, lived a dreadful life, until the day he found out that he was a wizard, and he got an admittance letter to his school, Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry, and lived a year of new dicoveries and magical adventures, that is, until he faced the person who'd killed his parents. You may not know this but there are these thing that people use when they write; they are called periods, sentances and paragraphs!
5)After that, Harry had been emotionally disturbed. Hmm, when was that? Must have missed that.
6)Harry(nor anyone else) has never call Hermione "Herm" AAARRRG!
7)Harry has lasted through another 10 rough years, got married to his best friend Hermione, and has had a young girl named Kylie. THE END!
8) "Herm, I just don't think that we should've had a daughter so early. I wanted to wait until I was like, 21." OOOPS, so much for the cleverest witch of her age thing huh? Guess they need to add sex education as a class at Hogwarts!
9)Harry was wondering at the time if he made the right decisions in his life. He felt that if he ran away, his family soloutions would solve themselves, but if he did, Hermione would find him, and if she was mad, he'd want to kill himself. I'm considering taking my own life after reading this... ;> Report Review
um what the hell this is a very confusing ficAuthor's Response: If you think this is confusing, talk to me and I'll fix anything I need to. Report Review
that was a really bad story!Author's Response: im allowed to be critically critisized like that, no!!!!!! can you make it a little positive?!? can you at least tell me what i did wrong???????? Report Review
Oh My Gosh he killed his daughter?
That is horrible.
It is also very good.
magicguy93Author's Response: i know, really good twist, right??????? Report Review
What the heck?Author's Response: well i bet you're thinking that this is gonna be a weird story, but im still working on editing it, but that wont help, cause im done and i really wanna make the plot better, but i dont have time. im really sorry.........................................
NOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! no, im just joking. ill try to fix the plot as much as i can. Report Review
It was pretty good
Author's Response: thanx. im happy u like it Report Review
SadistAuthor's Response: my new ones, once i get them finished, will be angst stories, so i hope that you're ready! Report Review
I love this story.Write more chapters please.Author's Response: thanks. sry but ive been so busy posting my new story, but ill hav mor on the way Report Review
wow! this is gonna be interesting! keep writing! really good! Author's Response: ive finished it but itz on my computer and im waiting on my new 1 2 b finished. sry its takin 2 long. Report Review
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