Hi this is dracoslover1 from the forums here to review for you.
I like this story. It was short, but I think it is one of those stories that is good being short.
There were no spelling or grammatical errors as far as I can tell, so you must have the best beta in the world!
You said in my topic that you did not even know who the character could be for this story. To me, it seemed that this fits perfectly for Severus Snape and Lockhart. The italics fit good for Lockhart (don't ask me why by it just seems that way to me). But everything else is Severus.
This is a really good story. I like it.Author's Response: Ah, hello there. I rather like it short too, I've been in a short funk. No matter what I do no novels come forth. I think it's because of my "system", but that's another story. Snape...you know, it might fit him. But then, I could almost see him as thinking "This man's insane." Hmm. The italics are (intended) to be some random, unnamed...person from some bygone era with similar ideas of blood purity. It can't be a new idea, I think. Besides, no matter how hard we try, history tends to repeat itself. And yes, an insanely amazing beta.
Thank you! Happy to hear you liked it, too. Report Review
Wow - I... find it hard to leave long reviews when I'm speechless. I mean, my words seem trivial compared to yours. You've got more large words than... well, I can't think of anyone or anything at the moment.
I'm not even going to pretend to have understood all of the words...
Trying to look past them, I think that the fic was short, but brilliant. I don't share the views, but they were incredibly well written. I mean, you know, the big words really makes you feel... obliged to think what the big words think, because they're like royalty. Or something.
Isn't it ironic how I can't find the right words? He he.
I only wonder who it's about. Well, good job anywaysAuthor's Response: Wow, speechless? I'm honored! The big words thing...I was in a "ginormous, yummy words" mood, so of course I had to write something like that. : ) Royalty? Interesting comparison. Heh, that's awesome. It is very short but I felt like I kind of exhausted myself (though I'm sure there's more I could do, I'm just too lazy). I'm not entirely sure who it's about, either. And yes, I am the author...oh well. I started out with one idea of a person, changed it, and then decided it was ambiguous enough to be a lot of different people, which only about half of me likes. I don't know. And I certainly don't share the views either, but I think that's what made it most interesting for me.
Wow (again), thanks for the praise! I'm glad you liked it. Report Review
Woah - this is simply brilliant. It would be a TOTAL page turner if: a.) this was a books, and b.) if this thing ended up being more than one page. :-P But the language was beautiful, showing that you know what you're doing. The pace of this was amazing, and the way you pulled everything together was breathtaking. It was very different from anything I've seen and I really enjoyed reading it. VERY nice work!Author's Response: Heh, for some reason I found your "total page turner" phrase amusing enough to snort. So becoming, I know. I'm glad you liked it so much. I was a bit worried about pace, so yay! And the ending bit was really an afterthought, post-beta and everything. Originally this was going to be a Regulus fic, but as my beta pointed out the language didn't fit and I liked it too much to change. Changed characters instead in a flash of inspiration. And yes, it is...different. I don't think I've ever read anything quite like it either. I'm not sure how canon it is, but oh well. I thought it was an interesting character study-type. Thanks for reviewing this too! Report Review
Ciaoxbella from the forums here, reporting for reviewing duty!
I thought this was short, but brilliant. The language proved that your writing skill is not only mature, but quite advanced as well.
I think that the story is quite abstract, open for interpretation and I like that about it. It's flowy and with meaning especially for such a short piece.
Good job!Author's Response: I'd just like to start by saying that I love your penname, it cracks me up every time I see it.
But anyway, thanks for prompt review. Yes, I was going for something a bit more abstract (I was feeling pretty philosophical at the time), which also resulted in the "meaning" and openness. Of course, I did write with a specific interpretation in mind, but I like the idea of people coming up with their own as well. And I agree, it does rather flow.
Thanks again! Report Review
Hey! You asked for this review, so here it is! :) I love how you use such affleunt language in this! It's really unique, and something I would never think of. I didn't really find it exciting, but it wasn't meant to be. It was meant to be thought provoking. I'm not really in the most thought provoking mood (the New Years Par-tays last night), but really, I liked that. I thought it was a good use of an OC, and it really was thought-provoking. Good job. Wow, there isn't that much more to say. I'll go review something else of yours, because I seriously don't know what to say in a review to this. Good job, however.
~*~KeNzIe~*~Author's Response: Yes, it was meant to be thought provoking rather than entertaining, and only sometimes can those two be the same thing. : ) The OC wasn't an OC at first but it fit so much better this way. Thanks for the prompt response, and Happy New Year! Report Review
Wow. What an incredibly deep and thoughtful peace. There is no critique I can offer. This is just amazing. Beautiful work. Wonderful.
*Eli*Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. Yes, it was meant to be rather "deep and thoughtful" so I'm glad that's how it turned out. I was musing on evil thinking it was good...I'd love to do so more in that vein, but I'll wait for the inspiration. Thanks for the review! Report Review
Wow, very descriptive. I liked it ^_^. You can't find that many stories like your's.
~KeiraAuthor's Response: I do like my descriptions. Thanks for the review. Report Review
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