Very well written, the only thing I have to pick over is the date at the bottom, it doesn't sync up with the timeline you have, if the sixth book is supposed to be taking place 97-98.
Other than that, wonderfully well written, I enjoyed it immenselyAuthor's Response: I didn't really put much thought into the date. I wanted to place it later like 99-2000, but felt that it would take away from the stroy in significance.
Thanks for the review though. :) Report Review
What an original story! I love the idea and way it was written and it's cool you kept Neville's identity secret until the end. Good job!!!Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate it. Report Review
that was very well written. i loved the fact that you don't tell who it is until the end... this was great!Author's Response: Thanks so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :) Report Review
Oh my god!! That was so good!!! I have to admit, I couldn't figure out who it was. At first I thought it was Harry, then Lupin, then Ron. I never suspected Neville. Though I suppose it should have been obvious from the way he talked about reading about plants and things.
This was great! Very descriptive and creative. I loved reading this.
xoxo Tayah Author's Response: Yeah, I tried to give the reader little clues and tid-bits here and there. Some how, while I was writing, I felt I made it a bit obvious. I'm glad to see the effect worked!
Thanks a Bundle for the review! :) Report Review
that is really cool! it kind of reminds me of flowers for algernon! *have u ever read that book??* neway not the plot of the story really.more of how it was written...i luved itAuthor's Response: I haven't read it, but thanks for the suggestion. I love reading new books! ;) Report Review
Hey, my name is Shadow and I am a staff member at Behind this Mask... (www.freewebs.com/shadowxsong/behindthismask/index.html) Anyway, I am here to find some stories that are worth being entered into the competition and I think yours is one :D I really enjoyed reading it. If you are interested or just want some more info, then drop by at the site. We have tons of catergories open and it's really quick to enter, plus you'll recieve a banner which you can display on your story here at HPFF (as it is within the size limit) or just on a website/myspace I really hope you consider entering. Hope to hear from you soon. Shadow
Author's Response: That's very intresting . I'll definately take a look into that. Thanks! Report Review
This has been an extremely interesting read, the ending really was a shocker, it was in short a brilliant one shot!Author's Response: Thanks so much. That means alot to me. :) Report Review
I'm going to go ahead and say that I absolutely loved this. Very, very orignial idea, and well exectued. My only complaint was the parts that the Ministry witheld. I didn't really understand that bit...care to explain a bit?
-melleygAuthor's Response: The Ministry can typically be annoying so I used that factor in this. Plus, it's a public letter and I don't think the Ministry would care to give too much information. Because of that, they with hold the most important parts. Report Review
Good grief...this is good. I haven't read something like this before and it was...very good. They way you've written it is excellent.Author's Response: Thanks, I love fiddling with different perspectives of writting. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
Wow that was great really good but what happened to harry and what did the ministry with hold and was neville really the chosen one? so many questions Author's Response: Yes I know. I'm glad that it made you think though. I figured I'd write about something like this because it's such a possible alternate scenario.
Thanks Alot for the review! Report Review
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