I'm going to be honest with you and tell you I think Hermione was really out of character in this. I think that Hermione would've been worried about Cho too and wouldn't have exploded at them like that. The writing was really good though, and I think you had Lavender and Parvati really in character.
8/10
**wazlibsgrl*

Author's Response: thanks, sometimes when a girl likes a guy, they tend to act out of character, i know my sister does, but since lavender and parvati are just kinda there, i like playing with them

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Cute chapter.10/10

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Lavender and Parvati are just like literally Barbies to you aren't they..? I like this and can SO imagine it happening

Well written, nice idea, good job

Author's Response: thanks...they are like Barbies

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Hunh. Interesting. Sounds like Hermione is a bit of a brat too, Cho deserves just as much sympathy as Cedric or Harry.

Author's Response: Thanks, I was going for her to show how much she really cares about only Harry (at the moment)

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Hey, I know you said this was finished and all, but I really think it would make a great short story or novella, with hermione trying to hide her feelings for Harry, Ron liking Hermione, and not doing a great job of it, and Lavender and Parvati prying more to fnid out what's wrong w/ hermione. it could carry out over the summer, maybe at some camp thing. Or the quidditch world cup? Whatever - just some thoughts. If you're leaving it, that's fine too. It's spiffing. They're so funny! (L. and P.)

--Cheers,
10/10
Dragonette

Author's Response: Thanks!!! L and P are very funny. It's a good idea, making it longer, hm...*starts getting ideas*

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That was pretty good!

Author's Response: Thank you!! I read that Lavender story of yours. It's really good.

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