but that wasn't good
it is too lovey dovey
put humor in it
and stop all the love Report Review
That was good. don't leave me on the edge of my seat for long!! I give you a 10/10!Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! It means a lot. I promise I will update soon! Report Review
To start I thought that the plot was very interesting. I think you have very good describing words. Like (extravagant). I also think that Ginny sounds absolutely beautiful! Maybe you would like to be proposed to at that exact same spot!!
My score 10/10Author's Response: Thanks. Report Review
love itAuthor's Response: thanks Report Review
I luv this story so very much. I really want to read more, so plz kep writing!
PlzPlzPlzAuthor's Response: I will keep writing, and thank you so much for taking the time to reveiw. Report Review
I luv this fanfic. Plz write more. I will definately read!
Plz Plz PlzAuthor's Response: I am definitely going to write more, I just have a few glitches to work out. For some reason this story just kind of comes to me naturally. Thanks for reviewing, I really appreciate it. A lot of people read but don't review, so most of the time its a let down. Report Review
heyyy AWESOME story! keep writing, please!!! This story is AMAZING!!!
Do you have any other fics i could read?Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, I really appreciate it, it means a lot to me. I only have one more story right now its called A Setback. Eventually I am going to post a one-shot, so be on the look-out for it. It will be called Remembering, or something like that . . .lol! Report Review
Interesting, keep up the good work!Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing, I really appreciate it. Report Review
That was actually really good. you should put the new chapters on soon. Author's Response: Thx Report Review
Haha, I saw your author's bio and I get that I look like Hermione Granger (or like Emma Watson, specifically) ALL the time. Like everyone I meet. It's kind of creepy.
But anyways, you asked me to review your stories - so here I am reviewing! As for the story, some constructive criticism:
1. Make sure to watch your grammar. You don't seem to have much of a problem with spelling or with writing coherent sentences, but you tend to change tenses. It annoys the reader (at least me because I'm a grammar FREAK) and distracts from the story.
2. 'Everyday' not 'every day' - see paragraph 8.
3. Wink*wink*nod*nod.What? We're not in a chat room.
4. 'Mione.gag me. But of course, that is only a personal annoyance, some people might think it's cute. I've never been a sucker for cheesy romance stuff or sweet talk.
5. “Now that’s no way to talk to your bass,” Harry replied.haha, I think you mean 'boss'!
6. “No problem, anything for the love of my life and mother of my children." .Ew.see explanation for number 4.
7. No offense, but to be kind of blunt, this is a very boring beginning.
8. Too much speaking, not enough description about the characters. I want to be able to SEE what they're doing not just know what they're saying. With your descriptions I just see them talking, unmoving, and doing nothing else.
9. There are several corny parts, and much of the story is unrealistic not necessarily in the plotline but how you phrase it, how you write it. It's hard to explain, but you don't write how I would see 'real' people talking.
But...don't despair. Your writing is not bad and is far from hopeless. I'm just VERY critical of anything I read; I try to be constructive as often as I can, though. Don't be discouraged. Continue to write, and you'll improve!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing. I am glad that you have taken the time to read and review my story. When I edit the story I will definetly take you constructive criticism and fix the things you mentioned. Report Review
Dear, Jiggly Puff,
Great start, but you might want to review your story before you post it, for instance, bass? Boss of course. Well also since I know that you have at least two more chapters written at home, me being you sister and all, why aren't you writing them on the site? You've even read them to me and asked me for advice even though I'm thirteen and your fifteen so as soon as you can post some more up , okay? Good luck with getting other reviews, I'm adding more sometime this week, so when they valodate, you have to read and review, okay?
My score would be 8/10!
I wish you would stop asking me how to finish your chapters, my stuff just comes to me okay, or it has happen at school, or at home or anywhere else I like to spemd my time!Author's Response: Thanks Bubble-Wrap! Your support is most appreciated! Report Review
This is a great Fic! keep it goin!!Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. It's amazing how many reads there are, but so few reviews. Report Review
Thats awesome I love it, I have added it to my favouritesAuthor's Response: The fact that you have added it to your favorites is absolutely wonderful. It means so much to me. Please keep reading and reviewing.
I love this story! There aer a couple typos, but other than that - Wonderful! Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, I appreciate it so much! Report Review
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