Ok there are some good stories on this site. Some have spectacular plots, some have excellent style to their writing,ome authors just have an intuitive grasp of character.
Very few have it all. There are 38,000 stories on this site. I may have read 2 or 3,000 thousand of them. This is the best of the bunch. This is a 10 in every category and you can tell you took a lot of care and time in crafting this story. And the little golden moments were you modiifed the book quotes from Rons POV were especailly grand.
Only CC I can give is to work on your spacing an paragraphs, espeically in the last section, but that is just layout not writing.
Truly one of the best stories on the site. Report Review
You warned me but I just couldn't keep away. Oh my gosh, this story is so sad. I feel like crying or throwing up 'cause I can't imagine what seeing the love of your life dead is like. The flashbacks were great but it's so sad! Report Review
s-s-sa-a-ad-dd..so s-a-ad. how did she ...er...pass away..was she like protecting the order. or sis she like jmp infront of ginny to block the killing curse or something? GREAT STORY THOUGH...VERY TRAGIC! Report Review
that was the saddest thing ever! it was FANTASTIC, just incredably depressing. love stories gone wrong isnt my favorite thing to read, but yours is done so well... Report Review
Beautiful story....I love how you put everything into detail and then brought it to life. Loved it. Report Review
AWW IM CRYING. I DONT LIKE SADNESS, BUT WHY WAS SHE SMILING?? WAS IT RON?? Report Review
Started off good but a little sad at the end dont ya think...lol but good. I really like your stories. Report Review
you made me cry, that was tragic...but it was an awesome story. Report Review
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