hmmm this is interesting...and good!
i like it!!
hehehe mutant demon babies indeed!!! lol
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Love this story! The simple, yet suspenseful ending sentence rocks. Please keep writing this story, I love it! And update ASAP! Good job, cant wait to see where Lily/Sirius comes in. Report Review
I love the first chapter. I haven't read many fanfics that start off with the Marauders in their first year, so this is a delightful change! :0) My only complaint would be that Lily seems a little frail. Author's Response: hah yeah... i'm not gunna lie and say i was going anywhere with that.. but yeah I just think it would be impossible for her to flourish in her household, being constantly put down and everything. Report Review
It was really good! I'm interested in Sirius's dream. . . anyways, i liked the whole thing with peter. haha. stupid moron. great job. i love it!!Author's Response: Thanks! I just decided i was going to use foreshadowing and whatever but mine may be too obvious.. get back to me on that at the end of the story haha Report Review
awesome story!!! I love it!Author's Response: wow! thank you! Report Review
well i think you should continue it;its started off really good and i like the idea of Sirius and Lily being friends. I agree abut writing the same thing in other peoples view points, it is probably easier either sticking to a general or different person per chapter. Anyway like i said hope you do continueAuthor's Response: Aw thanks so much! I'm loving all these reviews! Report Review
They both knew they were White-clad in a family where Black was uniform. That was the best line I've ever read on this site that describes the Black family. I loved it. Very good.
Now, for the whole story. It was great and I absolutely loved it. All the characters were in character and everything. It was well written and no mistakes that i saw. Great job. Keep posting because this is going into my favorites where i will patiently wait for you to update. Author's Response: Oh I'm glad you liked that. I kind of felt like I was rambling this whole chapter but guess not! haha thanks a bunch, I'll update soon! Report Review
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