It is a real bumpy ride, your story, you didn't exactly go into detail about the war, leaving me feeling a little dizzy, which I believe is all to the good, because war stories always hve a chaotic quality to them (Saving Private Ryan amyone?).
Great story, I'm off to the sequel.Author's Response: Dear Vermouth, thank you! Private Ryan - one of my favs, I guess it really describes (especially in the first 20 minutes) what war looks and feels like. It's chaotic and shocking to the very extreme. Thank you so much for your review! Report Review
Totally excellent. I loved the last line that Snape said, it was totally perfect. Please keep up the wonderful work.Author's Response: Wow! Thank you! I haven't received a review for that story for more than a year! Thank you so much! wings Report Review
I loved this story. It was very very well written and intresting. You are a very very good writer. Keep writting, 10/10Author's Response: Thank you Akt312! That's what every author wants to hear! Thank you so much, dear! wings Report Review
There's just something about your work that I love. Everything you write flows neatly, with lovely descriptions and your not afraid to use good old fashioned raw emotions in your characters which is great!
Fantastic one shot, and I loved Snape's last line about Hermione lol, feels like something he would say.Author's Response: Hello again,
I'm so glad you find that my stories flow well, I'm always so anxious about that.
"Good old fashioned raw emotions" - I love that phrase! It's a gem! lol You very aptly described the main point of all my stories with that phrase.
I find that these raw emotions are the real drives in our lives, it's just that the are often hidden beneath our "civilized reasons and explanations". lol
By the way, I'm working an a new one-shot now about Hermione and Snape, it is called: "Pepper and vanilla". Simultaniously I'm writing the next chappie of the Tainted. I'm sorry for all this delay, I'm busy with exams and work, but all my remaning time is dedicated to these stories!
Thanks Darling, you're awesome! wings Report Review
Wow this was very intense. I loved it. You show the terrible outcome of a real war very well. I felt bad for everyone involved.Author's Response: Thanks. :) wings Report Review
Wow, this was AMAZING!! I can never get enough of the descriptions you use, they're so fantastic!
The way you described the scenery and emotions the characters felt were so real, that I felt as if I was in their head. It's nice to read a story where Hermione had some depth to her as more than just a brainy school girl.
All in all, this was brilliant and I can't wait to read more from you... then again, I migh just do that :) 10/10Author's Response: Hello Miss Remus,
it's nice to "see" you again.
Yes, I was also fed up with the little-bookworm-Hermiones, I believe she deserves more. I think she's a very strong person besides being incredibly clever and I thinkthat she's also a very original character (think of the SPEW, and DADA), yet sometimes I feel that even JKR disregarded her depth and ability to chage.
I could talk about this for hours, but I'll have to stop now. Thank you very much for your support!
Through this story I've met wonderful people and excellent writers, I haven't even thought it will mean so much!
Thanks! wings Report Review
I did like the story. Very interesting. Just wondering is this post Deathly Hallows and if so, how long after?Author's Response: Hi! It's an alternative universe app. 6 year post HBP. The Dark Lord was still strong and Harry lead the Order, at least what reamined of them.
So Hermione was about 22 years old.
Thanks for your questions. :) wings Report Review
I didn't know there was a prequel to "Free Love." I'm glad I read it though. Are you going to do a sequel to Free Love? ~10/10Author's Response: Well, maybe. I'm getting used to the idea. Well, I'll work a bit on the plot and see if I can make something worthy of reading. Thanks for encouraging ShantiSnape! You're so sweet! wings Report Review
cool, will you continue it?Author's Response: Well, I don't know. I don't know whether there is a point in continuing it. What would these two people do? Well, nothing like marrying and having children. Their story will never be a happy one. Well, in a word, I don't know. :D thanks for your interest Goldenlilies, wings Report Review
Wow. Wow, wow, WOW. I am awestruck. You really know how to work the imagery, the pathos, the angst of the story. I am AMAZED by the story. . . and besides, I'm a bit of a softie for Snape anyways. . . ^.^
Congratulations on writing such an excellent story!
Cheers, ReginaAuthor's Response: Dear Regina! Thanks a lot, you can't imagine how much your encouraging words mean to me. As you will see, all my stories include Snape, somehow, so I can admit I'm softie for him, too. :D
You, dear reviewers, you help me soo much! Thank you. Report Review
you are an awsome witer so please please please keep writing dont gie up like those ther writers do because you have real potential
Layla-annAuthor's Response: Dear Layla-ann! Thank you, all your reviews gave me more courage and faith to continue than I received for the last two years. So I WILL continue. :D Thanks, wings Report Review
You have a way with descriptions, you know that? The descriptions are amazing, you use uncommon metaphors that make it seem so fascinating.The giant octopus of a cloak in the one that springs to mind the most.
I love the way you've turned Hermione jaded and slightly cynical, while at the same time preserving a bit of the naivety that is...her. She's at once innocent and tarnished, and it's amazing.
This is just a phenominal piece, and there's not many other ways to describe it than amazing. I truly enjoyed this. Author's Response: Dear Goddessofsnark!
Wow, it's amazing reading a review written by the author of one of my favourite stories, "The Vicious Cabaret"! Thanks a lot!
I'm glad you liked the story, your opinion means a lot to me!
You know, it's a very interesting writing a story with Snape and a second person. In my opinion Rowling has given Snape such a multidimensional character that only some of her other characters (like Dumbledore) can match him. Just think of the HPDH. She found her other characters in a peculiar situation (but then again, it's just my theory :), don't take it seriously); they seem a little weightless in comparison with Snape. So this was my dilemma, I had to make Hermione equal (as much as my skills allowed it) to Snape. And for that she had to become more mature, she had to become just as many layered as people who have lived through tragic times.
That was, in my opinion, the only way to build up the awkward, yet important realtionship between Snape and Hermione.
So, thank you very much for your review! It meant a lot! wings Report Review
My my. Quite a handful of talent and imagination you there.
-EveAuthor's Response: Thanks Eve! Your words really mean a lot to me. :) wings Report Review
I bow to you -this was wonderful. You have a great way with words. The way you describe things is so good. Sometimes though, you cross that little line, and I can't help but feeling then, you lose yourself in too much detail and too many metaphors and adjectives, which takes the attention off of what you're really trying to say, and that's a pity, because the story is so wonderful! I have to say I was really impressed. I'm a big fan of Snape and I don't believe he is a bad guy. This portrayal of him was very believable, though, and I especially liked the ending. I like how their souls get intertwined because they just don't have a choice, and how she ends up keeping him alive even though she was really set out to kill him.
I'm so surprised this hasn't got more attention or reviews, it is so worth it!Author's Response: Dear Strawcherry! Thank you very much for your review. I appreciate it very much for this was one of those very few remarks, which included some very valuable criticism. Thanks once more. I'll work on not crossing that line you mentioned. :D I'm glad you liked the story, it was a very intense feeling writing it. I like traditional Hermione, but I believe there is much more depth in her character than it is usually shown. I found the idea of Hermione go through the human tragedies and change (because everyone changes in a war) very inspiring. This way she could finally match Snape as an equal. Thanks once more for your helpful criticism. wings Report Review
Wow.... That... was amazingly powerful.Author's Response: Glad that you liked it. I still have some mistakes in it, but had no time to correct them. But I will I promise. I too, find this story quite powerful. Thanks! Report Review
It made me cry, why do thesse things always make me cry?It was great O give you a rating of 222!
~SerenityAuthor's Response: Thanks Serenity! Crying is good sometimes, isn't it? :) Thanks for your review and rating! It's my first 222 rating, I have to admit. :) wings Report Review
i hardly ever see a story as well written as this! This is one of the greatest stories i've ever seen on this website. its really really really good. i give you a 10! do you have other stories because i would love to read them. also would you read my stories? There is The Face of Destruction and Trapped. i haven't started Trapped because i'm waiting for the chapters to get validated but i hope you could give me your opinion!Author's Response: Dear Trina! Thanks a LOT for your review! This story was inspired by the early autumn and unusually "desperate" weather this year, evbeing neurotic?). I'll gladly read your stories. Wait for a review! bye, wings Report Review
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