wooo i finally found you! short and sweet! a few grammar mistakes but otherwisw cool. could be longer! :) Report Review
DUDE!!!! PLEASE UPDATE CUZ ME LIKEY!!! hehe. sugar makes u crazy so dont mind me! lol. Report Review
Hmmm. Quite an intro. Report Review
Pease start this story who knows bring the twins into Harry's 6th year's book and ley the twins help in the plot that would be unique Report Review
Love the idea from the twin’s point of view. Keep writing to it as it’s original and fresh. Will be interesting when the other characters get involved. Please continue it as it looks’s great so far.
hehe that was cute! I really liked it! Report Review
It tends to go on and on...it needs a plot. Try getting a beta to fix the spelling errors ie: Grigotta. And when you use a 'single quote' it shows up on the screen like '/ this '/ If you fixed the simple errors it would have much more outcome on the coming plot. The details are great, just don't go overboard. Try to imagine you are writing this story for a eleven year old: enough details to catch their attention but not too many as to lose it. Report Review
Well, you tend to kind of ramble. Good descriptions, and a nice intro. A little advice. Imagine you are a reader that has never read the Harry Potter books. Not that that's likely to happen, but all the same... If you were, what would you think of it? Try rearranging some of the elements of the story. Some things could probably be scrapped completely. Do we really need to know about the current state of the Weasley family? Probably not. Some sentences are runons, and there are a couple misplaced words.(Gringotta...They were yet to see it yet...?!) And what about a conclusion? Don't just sort of stutter to a halt, give it a definite end. Make it a cliffhanger, if you must, but don't just slap on a concluding sentence and call it quits. Try to stay in the same tense as well. Choose ONE, past or present, but don't use both in the same chapter, and especially not in the same sentence! I'm sorry! I just totally trashed your story! Ok, I know you probably hate my guts now, so I'm just going to shut up.
~ Sali Report Review
So far this is the most unique idea I\'ve seen on this website so far. I think it\'s great that someone is actually writing about Fred and George\'s career for a change. Keep up the GREAT work! Report Review
WOW!!!!!!!!!!! I love your idea and you definitely have to continue. A fic on the twin\'s shop is a great idea. Hope to hear more soon.
P.S. Thanx for reviewing my fic! Report Review
WOW!!!! So cool, I love this fic and you have to keep writing. The idea is so unique, I love the twins and the Weasleys overall!! Again GREAT FIC and keep on writing!!!!!!! I really can\'t wait till u write more. You\'re a very good writer, I love the descriptions.
P.S. Could u please read and review my fic, \'A Lost Love\' please, thanx. And if u have time, could u do the same for my fic \'Love and Sorrow.\' Report Review
HEY! first of all, i wanna say good story!!!!! second of all, thank you SO much for reviewing my story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i\'m glad you like it!!!!! cya \'round,
erika Report Review
Good start! I can\'t wait to see where this is going~ Report Review
Its cool so far,but is Harry gonna have a part in the story too? Report Review
Yes,he will. I am going to add most characters in Report Review
keep going add some interaction between people. Report Review
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