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I was smiling the whole time i read it! this is such a good story!!! amazing and great!
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That was great! Makes me want to go back and reread HBP...again. I'm such a sucker for R/H. I loved the description of the fire in Hermione's eyes...both literally and figuratively. Well, done! Report Review
I'm actually in love with this piece!
I don't know if this line should have made me laugh, as the whole piece was so sincere - "Well, that royally backfired and bit me right in the arse." - but it really did! :D The whole thing was written so well, a perfect balance of everything, it was kind of light-hearted, but achey as well, you know what I mean?
It was great the way you completely re-told the whole scene so that what was happening was the same as in HBP, but you hardly repeated any of it. And I LOVE that the reason Ron rubbed his eyes after he said "I love you" was because there were tears.. :)
This is a lovely one-shot, and what I consider an accurate portrayal of what Ron must have been thinking at the time. I think the Lavender bits were particularly well done, it's just the kind of thing he would say :)
Well, a 10/10 from me, obviously: brilliant job here, Mon :)
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Aww little Ronnikins in love =) I love fics that take moments from the books and tell them from a different POV - good job on this one! It's so sweet how Ron seems to know Hermione feels the same way (not that it's not obvious to everyone else but him!) but he's way too nervous to make the first move...
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Aww! that's so cute! wittle Ron is all grown up and thinking girls aren't so ickie after all =D so nice! very well done!
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Bravo. i like think Ron's a bit deeper then a teaspoonAuthor's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you agree that Ron's deeper than Hermione gives him credit for! ~Mona =) Report Review
Ha Ha HA! SO cute! I never thought of the scene in that way! Way to expand the narrow - minded horizons of us literal text readers!Author's Response: Hee, thanks so much for your kind words! ~Mona :) Report Review
WOW, it was gr8. it was fun to read it. ron was really cute. anygirl would love to have someone think for her like that. its cool. i think, u should write more n more n more of such stories.Author's Response: Thanks very much for your lovely review! And ya never know what I might come up with next *wink* ~Mona =) Report Review
oh! i really liked it! it seemed jjust like a bit of a repeat of the book, but it wa intersting to see it from a diffrent point of veiw! clever! You should do harry and ginny by the lake after he kissed her, that would be cool because Jk Roling didnt write it so you could do like, anything!
~ZoeAuthor's Response: Thank you Zoe! I'm really glad you enjoyed my little 'missing POV'... as to Harry/Ginny - you know, that's quite a good idea, but I'm not sure if I'll be able to write that anytime soon...
Again, thanks so much! ~Mona :) Report Review
Very nice, sweet read!!! I love reading R/Hr fics and I love reading missing moments fic, so this was very sweet indeed. I love how you have it all resolve around the "I love you" words, too-and there certainly seems to be a shortage of fics written in Ron's POV on this site! Like I said, I really enjoyed it.
-Mara, :-)Author's Response: Mara,
Thank you so much for this lovely review. I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
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Aww that was so cute!! Well done 10 and going in my faves!! Oh and you in my fave authors!!! ~wired2damoon~Author's Response: *blush* Thank you so much for this generous review! =) ~Mona Report Review
Wow, that was very sweet. I normally don't go for Ron/Hermione stories but for some reason this one caught my eye. I very much enjoyed how you wrote Ron and he seemed very in character. You gave him depth when it came to his feelings on Hermoine and most people don't do that. Most stories I've read with Ron have him being a total git. I did notice a few errors through the story but not many. Perhaps you should consider a beta just to check over your work. On my author's page is a link to a site where you can find a beta. Great one-shot!, Mya.Author's Response: Thanks for the kind words, Mya!
Actually, I'm editing this little fic with another beta at present, so hopefully the endresult will be something I can be properly proud of!
Thanks again, ~Mona =) Report Review
Woow. I loved this! =] 10/10.Author's Response: Thank you very much!! ~ =) Report Review
Aww, that was incredibly cute...=P
Well doneAuthor's Response: Thank you!! ~Mona =) Report Review
Aaw! I also likes thinking that Ron actually meant what he said to Hermione. And I believe he did mean it. He just needed some exuse to tell her, thats all :) This story was so good! I was smiling, and smiling and smiling - ah, my face hurt! :D
10-10! No doubt! Author's Response: :D I'm smiling too now!! Thank you so much and yes, I firmly believe he just needed to get over himself and tell her... even if not intentional as such, I believe he meant it. Strange how our unconscious mind can tell us what we really want!! ~Mona =) Report Review
This was a good read. I would have liked it if it had had some more dialogue from the book, but then, of course, we run into issues of quotes and plagiarism and suchlike. I always enjoy reading stories that are either missing moments or scenes from another person POV, and this was an excellent piece for that.Author's Response: Thanks so much Ginny!! And yes, I would've liked to include more of the dialogue also but I was too afraid to do just what you mentioned. So easy to slide into copyright issues with these missing moments!!
~Mona =) Report Review
that was great! i wrote a story like this too. well, with the whole "i love you, hermione" thing from the book, but mine had a different ending. lol. i think yours was better. lol. it was a really good story, but also really well written! it's nto often you see a good story AND a well written story..job well done! Author's Response: Wow thank you so much for your lovely compliments! Must remember to go check your story out also!! ~Mona =) Report Review
That was the cutest thing i've read in a long time. I needed to read something like this, thanks for that! I always wondered what was going through Ron's head after he said that he loved her. She might of thought it was a friendly 'I love you' but did he? lol awesome one-shot, i'm adding this to my favorites!Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you so much!! I'm really glad you enjoyed this little piece! ~ Mona =) Report Review
I absolutely loved this scene and seeing it through Ron's eyes. Great, great short!!!Author's Response: Eek, thanks so much Mum!!! *huggles* ~ Mona =) Report Review
Haha im reafing HBP right now and i just passed that part. I forgot how much Ron and Hermione's relationship is in the book! This story is exactly what i picture Ron to be thinking. 10/10Author's Response: =) Thank you so much!! ~Mona Report Review
I wonder if I've ever read a story written from Ron's point of view... That was good! And sweet. And it sounded so much like Ron. And I like it when author's try to fill in the blanks. The Potterverse is too great to be seen only through one pair of emerald eyes - even if they are the Boy-Who-Lived's.
AnneAuthor's Response: Anne, thank you so much for this lovely review! *hugs*
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Mona, can I just sque at this story? It is so loverly. This scene is, naturally, one of my favourites in HBP and to see it from Ron's point of view was wonderful. It was such a fun read. I espcially liked the last bit about smiling as he finished the essay - lovely. 10/10 - you rock! ~ andy x x (Reviewing Circle on SAYS)Author's Response: Andy,
Thank you so much!! *squeee* hehe... I had to squee at this review, sorry =)
I'm so happy that you liked this - I was so so worried that I had Ron a bit ooc, so I am glad it comes across alright.
Thanks again for the lovely compliments.
~Mona *SAYS - huggle* =) Report Review
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