That was so sweet :D love it, really delicately done :D Report Review
I thought that was adorable. Simply wonderful. (Then again, I'm a Ron/Hermione supporter to the end...) Ron is so adorable, how could one NOT fall in love with him?! I think it was cute that he said her hair brought out her cheeks. It's a completely random, nervous thing to say. Would Ron even know what it means for hair to bring out her cheeks?! Lol. Anyway, good job :]:]. No grammar problems? No spelling issues? Props to you, my friend.Author's Response: Well, thank you so much for your gracious review. It made my bleak night so much better. I'm not much of a fan of Hermione/Ron either, lol. I'm glad you liked it. Report Review
Hermione flew over to where she was hovering beside Ron. She looked up at the sky, closing her eyes, letting the snowflakes dot her face.
I love the imagery in this snippet. I'm such a sucker for stories that take place in the winter months and with yours, I could just about feel the snow on my own cheeks *wink*.
“Oh Ron,” Hermione breathed. “You do listen in Astronomy.”
“No,” Ron shaking his head. He picked up the kit and his broomstick. “I listen to you.”
This last little bit is just brilliant. I got goosebumps when I read it! Beautiful, really.
I enjoyed this one-shot so, so much, especially the chemistry between Ron and Hermione. As with your other fic, it was absolutely spot on. Bravo!
The problems are the same as what I mentioned for Whiskey Lullaby. Your grammar needs a bit of polishing, and your sentence phrasing isn't what I would like it to be. But, other than that, the story is fabulous.
Author's Response: Oh wow, this review totally blew me away. This is the best critque I've ever recieved for this story or any story. You made me feel really good about my writing. Just wow. I really appreciate it. A lot. Report Review
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its good that you wrote a ron/hermione one, i think it tuned out better than all your harry/hermione stories. but i really like this one. it's cute!Author's Response: Well, thank you for the gracious review. I thought this was rather cute as well. Report Review
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