Nice way of blending the lyrics with story- it works very well, and the paragraphs all fit their accompanying lyrics nicely. Any chance of another chapter? Report Review
omg! i just wrote a dramione beautiful disaster songfic! it's totally different, and urs is way better, but still. the second time i heard the song, i was like "this song is made for a hermione/draco!" having read yours, i'm gonna try and fix it... i'm not gonna plagiarize... mine's just a shadow of what i wanted it to be, but yours is perfect. well, nothing's perfect, but it's way up there.
it's so sweet... :) Report Review
*runs to CVS and buys massive box of tissues* oh the crying.WELL at least since im crying you know you've done an awsome job!
peace be the ride,
ana joi Report Review
Aw! Report Review
aaw I loved your story keep it up! Report Review
that was beautiful.
need i say more?
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awww... I love it. Report Review
it lovely Report Review
The song was very fitting to the story, and I think you linked it with the paragraphs really well. The one thing about songfics is that it's hard to link the song seamlessly to the story itself without sounding redundant/repetitive, but you've done it really well. Oh, one little thing: you might want to change 17 to 'seventeen' since it's one word and usually spelt out ^^. The only issue I might have with this fic is that the first half of this was quite 'tell' and not 'show' but I guess you really can't do too much in a one-shot songfic; I've tried it before and I know it's hard (Lol and eventually I gave up on songfics altogether). The ending was good though, much more descriptive and the way you wrote it really suited. i.e. it was very 'in the moment' and romantic. I loved how you used the last line "He's beautiful", I think it's the perfect way to end this. Good job! [extra cookies and kudos for even writing a songfic!] =) Report Review
Wow! I love this one! Report Review
Aww that was so romantic, your stories are so beautiful! 10/10 Report Review
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