great start! u could take longer to describe some parts, dont feel u have to rush, but the plot line looks to be very exciting! lol, keep updatin!
ps would u like a banner? i can make you one, just post on my fic with what u want on it and i shall start soon :)Author's Response: thanks! i really appreciate the review. this is the first story i've written so i apologize if the writing isn't the best yet. i hope to get better though! please keep reviewing as the story goes on. and i would love a banner and i'll find you soon and let you know. thank you! Report Review
It was pretty good! I'm dieing for another chapter! I would totaly read it!! It's written ok. But the story and jist of it makes up for it!! Author's Response: hey...thanks for the review! its my first time doing this so i'm sorry if the writing isnt great yet. i'm working on it tho. i defintely appreciate you wanting to read more of it. i'm working on the second chapter now. thanks for the great review! Report Review
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