This was very good! I am aware of the fact that you have written this a long time ago and will probably not be expecting any reviews after such a long time, but I'm just stupid for not finding this faster, hehe.
First of all: your Snape. In the beginning I had some difficulty with the fact that he was giving away so much of himself to this stranger in a bar, but as the story continued, I understood and in the end I really think he was very believable. He is only human, after all, and at some point it felt, to me, as if he was talking to himself more than to the bartender. I work in a bar as well in the weekends, and I'm familiar with situations like this, which made the story all the more believable to me.
The fact that this was written from the bartender's pov worked so well, it enriched the story so much! The bartender doesn't know what we know, and that fills the story with nice little details that make the reader go 'ah!', like when Snape uses his wand and Utley thinks he's brandishing a knife or when Snape grabs his underarm (to which he reacts so... Snape! Well done hehe) and Utley doesn't understand that...
All in all, I think you did a great job with this and I really enjoyed it!
Ohh, and didn't you prove to be right in the end? Hehe. Personally, my belief in him never wavered, either!Author's Response: I can definitely understand how it's not exactly believable at first - that was something I struggled with - but I'm glad you thought I overcame it. Telling it from Utley's view was very interesting, really put a different spin on things: sometimes you learn more from someone else's interpretation than just hearing the narrative from the character's (Snape, in this case) perspective. And I was right! Huzzah. Thanks! Report Review
I loved this. I love how you show Snape more from the bartender's perspective and don't necessarily show what he's thinking himself so it's more mysterious. And I always believed in Snape. This fic is canon now, so well done for believing in the truth all along! I thought this was well written, with the joke and everything and I love how in character you kept Snape.
Excellent stuff!Author's Response: Thanks for the review and glad you liked it! It was more interesting to write from an outside perspective, particularly a Muggle one. (And I knew it all along!) Report Review
Very nicely done; it has the feel of something that was inspired by an arbitrary event and just sort of flowed onto the keyboard. It's always a pleasure to discover fics like that, as they're always unique and seldom deal with over-exhausted topics. Once again, you did a fabulous job.
Hugs, AlAuthor's Response: Glad to see you liked a fic of mine that was a different genre. It had floated around in my head for a while, but once I started writing it just kind of flowed on out onto the screen, as you said. Thanks for the review! Report Review
Interesting story, I like it alot :)Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
Wow. 0_o that just made my brain pop. It was amazing.Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
I really enjoyed reading this and it waasn't because i was sitting in scholl board to death. You could figure stuff out even though you didn't write it. or should I say typed it. Snape isn't my favorite character but then agian who's is he? Thank you Bye!Author's Response: Haha, happy to see that I've improved your educational experience. Thanks! Report Review
Ha ha!! I liked that joke!! T'was funny!! I really like this story!! I thought the writing was suberb and the plot was very clever well done to you!! This is going in my faves and I'm giving it 10/10 for its sheer brilliance!! Can't wait to read some more of your work!! ~wired2damoon~Author's Response: Glad you liked it and glad you decided to read more! Thanks! Report Review
wow that was interesting but i'm a little confused...i liked the joke at the end it was pretty funny...
was snape's "old friend" voldemort or dumbledore i'm confused. i'm thinking that its dumbledore but that would mean that you think snape isn't a death eater no offense but i just don't agree with that...sorry but that was kind of on my mind the entire time i was reading it but i thought it was very well written and very descriptive...
Mabye you would like to read some of my stories??? I give you a 10/10!!! great job!
~*TRINA*~Author's Response: His old friend is Dumbledore, or at least that's what I'm implying, at any rate. I'd love to get in a debate with you about this, but maybe you should just head over to the forums and look at the Snape thread there. Thanks for the review! Report Review
Not Bad Not bad keep it up Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
very well writen story however i dont quite agree with the story line, you see i have never liked Snape and have always doubted him, i dont think that he could ever be 'nice' an i think that D would ever ask him or anyone else to kill him. Sorry thats just the way i feel.
(just to say the story was very well written and interesting)
p.s sorry about all the negative comments!!!Author's Response: You're not the only one, but we'll see in Book 7, eh? Thanks! Report Review
Hmm... very interesting. I like the perspective. Snape dosen't seem the type to spill his troubles to a London bartender, but then again, he's not particularly sober.Author's Response: Haha, yeah, that was the reason I had him in a bar actually. Thanks! Report Review
Incredible... I love how you humanize Snape, just as Ms Rowling, I believe, intends to do in Book the Seventh. I've seen too many fictions where Snape is the quintessential "bad guy," where the authors don't bother to look beneath the surface and read between the lines. Yours is a truly spectacular story.
I also enjoyed how you included, or rather, alluded to, Snape's Dark Mark. The way that Snape handled the situation of being summoned by Voldemort seems very real.
The only thing that I believe detracted from the fiction was the parentheses... For some reason, when authors use them, it bothers me. This was very minor, however. Incredible job. I can't wait to see what else you've written!Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it! I'll look back at the parentheses and see if any changes need to be made. Thanks! Report Review
I liked this, I dont usually read on shots but this took my fancy and i have to say i am impressed. Author's Response: Glad you liked it! Thanks! Report Review
I really enjoyed that. Very dark, but very good. I hadn't really thought that Snape would be much of a drinker, but I guess, if I'd done that, well, I'd drink too.
Nice perspective, and interesting plot. 10/10Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
Interesting...I like it!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
I don't get it! What's the joke mean?Author's Response: See my other reviews. Report Review
That was very nice. You somehow managed to keep Snape realistic to his character, which I would think to be very difficult in a situation like this. It was a very nice short read, and I like that you fit in a plot and characters all in such a small space without overwhelming. It was very entertaining. Thank you.Author's Response: Glad you liked it. Thanks for the review! Report Review
wow haha that was a really good story. :) applause all around. and yea the joker pretty much owns. he always reminded me of snape =P 10+Author's Response: Haha, yeah the Joker is just a slightly funnier version of Snape really. Although you could make a case that Batman's quite like Snape as well. Report Review
I, too, believe that Snape is innocent even if I hate him. We think likewise. It's Dumbledore's request. I like the joke at the end. lol.Author's Response: I liked that joke as well!
dq should have read the disclaimer. but i dont get the joke either.
great fic. Author's Response: See below. :) Report Review
true snape! excelent. hes tough! I thougth you were gonna make your position on the snape issue vauge, but i guess from the last couple of paragraphs that your pro. i d k maybe im missing something, i didnt quite get the joke :-/Author's Response: The joke is saying that one of the inmates will make a bridge using a flashlight while the other one will walk across the bridge of light, which obviously won't work. The irony is that the second inmate says that it won't work, not because it's light can't be walked on, but because he thinks the other one will turn off the flashlight. Hope that cleared it up. Report Review
ooo i likeAuthor's Response: Thank 'ee. Report Review
:D HAHAHAHA! :D LOL! That was VERY good!!! I REALLY REALLY REALLY liked that1!!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
Hey good job there, Jembo. you preserved every aspect of snape. Very nice story. I took some time finding you though.Author's Response: Glad you liked it! Yeah, I should probably put a link in my sig or something. Sorry about that. Report Review
Ah...nice...kind of sad. I liked it anyways
Author's Response: You know, one of of these days I might just write a happy story. Thanks for the review. Report Review
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