That was a BRILLIANT story! I loved it! It gave such an insight into Tonks's character and it was REALLY funny! Well done! 10/10Author's Response: Thanks sooo much! :) Report Review
lol Dumbledore would just smile and do his whole I-am-at-peace-with-the-world thingy lol! That was class!Author's Response: Thanks, lol, totally classic! Report Review
its sooo good i luv it!!! huggles to thhe great author! you know you got a 10/10!Author's Response: Thanks sooo much! *huggles to the great reviewer!* Report Review
Great story!!! 10/10Author's Response: Thanks!
sadAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
dum dm dum dum. lol good jobAuthor's Response: lol, thanx! Report Review
aww sadAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
OMG! OMG! OMG! so sad! *sniffle* 10/10Author's Response: lol, Thanks! Report Review
AHH! NO NO NO NO NOO NO NO NO NO! 10./10 because I literally gasped!Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
no no no no no no no!! I luffle Sirius! Poor sad tonks!wah! I don't know who to feel worse for! 10/10Author's Response: Yeah I know, I really need to make this story happier somehow....
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aww, so close!10/10Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
e! I lurve it!Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
That was brill i loved it!
It fitted in with the story so well!
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Dun Dun Dun Dun.
and the plot thickens, good story, for Sirius's sake...
-NYMphieAuthor's Response: Thanks! Report Review
loved this story,
great ending (",)Author's Response: Thanks :) Report Review
Ahhh...this story is sooo amazing!!! I completely loved it, especially from Tonks' point of view, her thoughts were so realistic! And I love Remus Lupin as well...so I'm a big Tonks/Lupin shipper. I'm going to check out your other story that you mentioned, it sounds wonderful. Thanks for sharing this with us, keep up the good work!
DiandraAuthor's Response: Thanks sooo much! Your lovely review really made my day! Yep, Tonks and Remus are such a great couple! Thanks again! Report Review
This was an excellent chappie!!! 10/10 for sure! ;) YAY!!! This is absolutely perfect! keep up the great work.Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
I really liked it, It was really well written!!! Author's Response: Thanks!! Report Review
Aw! That was so cute! You really put that together well. You perfectly portrayed Tonk's emotions, internal battels, and what was happening and how it happened. Overall I'd give you a 100,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000,000/10! You wraped it up superbly! And thank you very much for thanking me in the authors note *blushes* Well, can't wait to read another one of your stories, keep writing!Author's Response: Thanks so much. And you really do deserve to be in my authors note, you reviewed like every chapter. Anyway, thanks again. Report Review
I didn't comment on every chapter because I wanted to read the whole thing before I gave my feedback! There were so many points where you painted a full, sensory picture with your words. You seem to have a talent for imagery. For example:
He makes me feel as though I am in paradise, away from all the worries of the wizarding world. Beautiful way to describe how she feels...
The house was holding its breath, everything was silent... Yes, I liked this a lot...you can FEEL it... I am gonna steal that one! You drew the reader right into the setting.
...but every time I closed my eyes I saw Dumbledore’s lifeless body sprawled across the ground, his once calm and comforting eyes, wide open, staring up at me. Ooh, *lupa staggers*. Calm and comforting but...dead. So powerful. So sad. Wrenches the heart with very few words.
I'd like to see you use that imagery more more more!!! Nice story progression, well described scenes. As always, I suggest putting "thoughts" in italics to separate them from the narrative, and pay attention to the tense. Thoughts and spoken words can be present tense, but narrative (the author's descriptive voice) is always past tense. (Sorry, too much university english under my belt!)
Thanks so much for this story! I love Remus and Tonks!Author's Response: OOOHHH, Thanks so much for you absolutely LOVELY llllloooonnnngggg review. I think I'll go back and fix some of my mistakes so thanks for pointing them out! Thanks again
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It was a bit short and choppy, but I love the silliness that runs through her mind throughout the story. That was pretty much how I expect her mind to work on most occasions. I love all the clumsiness as well.
I do think you got your wording wrong... I think he should have said "I don't deserve you" and not "you don't deserve me"... that sounded a bit conceited.
Still, overall I really enjoyed it. Great job!Author's Response: Oh yeah, I think I did get the wording wrong. I think I'll go back and fix that. Thanks for your nice long review and I'm glad you enjoyed this story! Report Review
she talks funny for tonks.then again, i guess i'm not one to criticise.it's very poetic and pretty. :)Author's Response: Thanks, um how does she talk funny? Report Review
Remus and Tonks, sitting in a tree, K-I-S-S-I-N-G first comes love, then comes marriage, then comes baby in a baby cariage! I LOVED THIS STORY!Author's Response: LOL, Thanks so much for reviewing all my chapters, you rock! Report Review
that story is so sad!!! i already HAVE my tissues out!Author's Response: I'm sorry, I don't know why this story turned out so sad. Thanks though for your review Report Review
wow.. its nice seeing this from Tonks' point of veiw!Author's Response: Thanks Report Review
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