i really liked it but can't understand why you put a disclaimer at the end of every chapter =) Report Review
awww. poor davis. well, sofian davis. not joe davis. he duznt need pity. he won the game 4 them. haha. well, anywayyzzz, GREAT DESCRIPSHUN!!! of thd quidditch game and of da injuriez, and the order. 10/10!!! xPAuthor's Response: Hahah thanks (:
And thanks for the review! Report Review
i liked the way you wrote the quidditch section
it was very similiar to the way j.k. writes it...
so great great job :]Author's Response: Thanks a lot! I reread the Quidditch parts in some of the books and I tried to see how Rowling wrote it so I could kind of write mine similar to hers. :] Report Review
honestly, this story is really well-written
you really know how to make the characters connect to your audience, which is hard to do.
nice job :]Author's Response: Aww, thanks a bunch. :]
I really tried. Hahah. Report Review
i like the dynamic you have between james and lily
it'll make it interesting in later chapters :]
yay for great writing!Author's Response: :] Thanks for all of the reviews. I'll try to update soon, though with school it's been really hard. Report Review
o james! i was wundrin wen they were gunna realize that! silly mr jamesy!o well he was 2 caught up in bein w lily 2 remember! i mean, would u remember 2 meet a teacher if u were havin the time of ur life w the girl u luv? ok well... ya i shouldnt say that cuz u could b a girl and im a girl 2 but still all i meant was that its 2 b expected! heehee i luv it! 10/10Author's Response: Hahah.
Your reviews make me laugh. =]
I know what ya mean, even though I'm a girl too.
Thanks for the review! Report Review
u shoulda made lily make a lie up off the top of her head! actually, no u shoudnt have cuz they can turn out weird. like 1 time i was jokin w my friend and i started makin stuff up off the top of my head and i ended up sayin sumthin bout bein afraid a dolls w cookies and milk in their hands! then we both burst out laffin at how ridiculus it was and- ill stop ramblin now and just say 10/10!Author's Response: Ahahah.
Funny story. =]
Anyway, thank you for the review and the 10/10. Report Review
I LOVE this story, and I don't care that you skip through a lot of time, JKR does (maybe not as much. . . ) I absolutely love the plot (even if I have read countless other stories with similar plots; you write it well, better that the other "writers" XP ) Perhaps it is the time skipping that sets your story apart from the others. . . Anywho, I love this story despite others' critiques and complaints.
Excellent story = D
~ Lemon Drop :)
p.s. Please write more. . . and fast! Please post ASAP! = D
Oh, and I absolutely love this capter!!! LILY HAS SOME SENSE! I mean, really, who could possibly resist James?!?!?!?!
And Sirius likes Ri, right?
WRITE MORE! Please? Author's Response: Oh wow.
First off, I would like to thank you for a long review.
I haven't been online in a while because I've been slammed with a ton of homework, so I'm sorry I haven't replied quicker.
Second- I'm glad you like the plot and everything!
Third- I'll definitely try to write more.
These next couple of weekends in October, I'll be extremely busy, but uh..I'm sure starting in November, I can start updating again. =)
Fourth- I don't know who could resist James. I LOVE JAMES. And Sirius. Siriusly. (;
Fifth- And Sirius might like Ri. You'll just have to wait and see in upcoming chapters.
=) Report Review
Yay! So far I love the story! Yay! Please update soon! Yay! Yay! Yay! Yay!Author's Response: Ah. Thanks for the review.
I'll try to update soon.
=) Report Review
This was such a great chapter.
Waiting with bated breath for the next.Author's Response: Aww. Well thank you. =)
Chapter seven might not have made complete sense because I've changed so much throughout chapters 1-6. But soon, after I get two or three chapters between the NOW chapter seven, it'll all make sense again. =) Report Review
oh i want to make sweet love to you pull out and jizz all over your face! Author's Response: Hah. Er. I don't even know what to say to that. Report Review
love love love this story...update soon! =DAuthor's Response: Aww. I'm glad you liked it. =]
I'll try my best to update as soon as possible. Report Review
absolutely loving it! please update soon!Author's Response: I'll do my best to update. Thank you for reviewing. =] Report Review
I am no longer a donkey, which is slightly depressing, considering how interesting life as a donkey was. For instance, I got to eat hay, which was a most unique and fascinating (though disgusting) experience.
I am back to being a human and thus I am able to review your story. I loved it! Lily is very original and tough and cool!
Ciao!Author's Response: I think you're one of my most random reviewers. And I've never once met someone who had been a donkey before. I find you thoroughly unique. =D Hahah. And I'm sure the hay was disgusting..I wouldn't want to eat that. XD
Anyway. Thank you for reviewing! (now that you can..hahah). I'm glad you loved it. =] Report Review
Sorry I can't review, me being an illiterate donkey and all...
but good chapter! YAY!
I think I feel a change in the wind coming on... which animal am I to become next?Author's Response: Ah, that's okay. =D
And thank you.
Oooh. I don't know what animal you'll become. =O -ponders- Report Review
i would review but I am a donkey so I can't.
By the way, good story! :)Author's Response: Hahah. Well, thank you. =] Report Review
You're ridiculous, Em!
YOU /DO/ WRITE AS GOOD AS I DO!
Better, even!Author's Response: I am NOT ridiculous, Sadieeee!
Thank you for saying I write good.
But by no means do I write as well as you do.
=] Report Review
Hey! You reviewed my story, so I thought I would return the favour. I love this story so far. The descriptions are fantastic and the dialogue is believable and realistic. Keep it up!
P.S. I love the J/L ship (and not just because it's canon =D)Author's Response: Oh okay. Well thanks a bunch for the review! And I'm glad that you love it. I'm glad you think the descriptions are fantastic and that the dialogue is believable and realistic. I try my best. =]
Oh yes, me too. I love J/L ships. I just can't get enough of them. I think it's amazing and such a mystery of how Lily and James came to be, after she apprantly 'HATED' his guts.
Once again, thanks for the review! Report Review
thanks for keeping me hooked. but you HAVE to write more soon! i about screamed when i saw there wasnt another chapter! this is an awesome story! way to go! :)Author's Response: Heheh. Chapter 8 is being worked on currently. I'm trying my hardest to get it finished soon. Right now though, I've had too much homework and I don't have enough time to write anymore. It makes me quite sad. =/ But, I worked on some today.
I'll try to hurry with it though. heheh. Thanks for the review! Report Review
SURIUS! SURIUS! SURIUS WAS NOT CAPTIAN! JAMES WAS! JAMES JAMES JAMES! JAMES!Author's Response: See, I was going to put James as Captain. Before I write my fanfics, or a chapter of them at the least, I /always/ go to the HP Lexicon first, to make sure I get the facts straight. I didn't see it written down anywhere that he was made Captain of the Gryffindor Quidditch team. Plus, he has other things to worry about in my fanfic. So therefore, I made Sirius Quidditch Captain. If I am wrong about it not saying that James was Quidditch captain, then I am terribly sorry and I will correct the mistake right away. Thank you for the review, though. Report Review
she has a strange selection of clothing...Author's Response: Heheh. Yeah. She does. Thanks for the review though. Report Review
Lily is so confusing! I must say, I'd be proud to own Rylie, she is a very important and fun character to have. Anywho, I rate 10/10. Update soon!:)Author's Response: Oh yeah I know. She confuses me too. Heheh. Aww really [about the Rylie part.] Well, thank you! Heheh. 10/10? Thankksss! I'll try to update soon. I'm sort of at a sticking point at the moment, trying to figure out where to go with the eight chapter, but I already started. I believe it's about half-way finished? =) Thank you for all of the wonderful reviews. Report Review
Yes! Lily is finally falling for James, even though she tries to deny it, it's true! I'm off to the next chapter. 10/10Author's Response: Whoo! I know, right? FINALLY. hahah. Thank you for the review. -grin- Report Review
Yep, Lily just made James' year. Wonder if they'll become more than friends. 10/10
Well, they obviously will, because of Harry...Author's Response: Hahah. Yesh. Lily did. And yeah, they obviously do. But the question is..how long will it take? =) Thanks for the review. Report Review
Well, Lily may think that she has feelings for Remus, but it's really James that she likes. Can't wait to find out what happens next. 10/10Author's Response: Heheh. =) Yep. Thanks for the review. Report Review
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