Aw that was really really good. Great job Report Review
beautiful and poingant. well done. Report Review
A strange fic, not very realistic, but it is written very good! Report Review
Wow. I've never really been into the whole Severus/Hermione thing, but this was just so brilliantly written. I loved all your descriptions and the way you conveyed Snape's emotions. I almost felt like I wasn't only reading this fic, but I was inside of Snape. You made this so real. Beautiffuly written. :)Author's Response: Wow! That's such a great compliment! Thanks. =D Report Review
The words that come to mind to describe this one-shot are chilling and maddening. Words simply can't do it justice. Perhaps I know a little of how Snape feels, given that you rely so much on less-imaginative readers to fill in the gaps between present and point of departure, canon. Not to mention the future that awaits Severus... You've kept him perfectly in canon (and Dumbledore as well, which is an unnerving feat of great ability). I've read quite a few H/S stories that try and deal with the age difference, but this is the only one that doesn't have to. The last dozen or so paragraphs bring the reader so close to understanding this enigmatic figure, but I'm glad that, in the end, you conceal the character as much as you reveal him. There's a very interesting idea of balance here, and, fittingly, nothing is overdone. I think the shortest way of saying what I want to say is to say that you have inspired me, and I heartily wish you the same inspiration! -- DanaAuthor's Response: As a writer, I can only hope to be inspired and to, perhaps, inspire others. Thanks! Report Review
You did a great job on this one! I think one of the hardest things in HP fanfiction is writing Snape 'in love', while keeping him in character. He just seems... unable, no, maybe he has just forgotten how to show the small signs of affection. I think you did a very good job on keeping him in character. He's been fooling everyone including himself (okay, maybe not Dumbledore) in denying that he loves her. And now, when it's too late... It fits within the tragedy of his character very well.
Your Dumbledore was very good as well! He plays the role of know-it-all very well in this, and I liked how you showed Snape's irritation for that. Report Review
I have had this story in my favourites for what seems like forever, and finally I had a chance to read it. It was so different to other Snape/Hermione stories I read, it was far more believable and heartbreaking, well done!Author's Response: Why, thank you for coming 'round for a review. Believability is always a plus, haha. Report Review
Simply wonderful. Your language is so rich and with every word you capture my attention, and they draw me in. The characterization of both Severus and Dumbledore is perfectly made and you describe Snape's emotions beautifully.
- StephanieAuthor's Response: Why thank you! I love your stuff, so any praise for you is really a compliment. Report Review
Well I really liked this fic. it captures all the characters in the way JKR has written them. it doesnt take any characters out of their depth. Snape is such a difficult character to write about when hes still "mean" which is what I think he will be until the day he dies. Dumbledore is also a difficult character to write about, he just has so many emotions and sooo many ways of thinking about stuff, he has many different perspectives and you did amazing in keeping them all in mind when writing this.
Good Job!! :)Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you think I kept everyone in character. Report Review
best story i have ever read on HPFF. fantastic.
P.S-Rating: 15/10Author's Response: WOW! That's such a high compliment, considering all the wonderful stories on here. Thanks! Report Review
The imagery in the story was extrodinarily vivid.You also did a great job of understanding the characters so their responses were believable.It is definitely a new relationship I had never thought of, but an interesting one none the less.I loved the mix of flashbacks and thoughts that were woven together.Also when snape lost it, that was just brilliantly written.You're writing is vivid, captivating, and extraordinary.Author's Response: wow, thanks for the positively glowing review! Report Review
Heh heh so this is my official first foray into the world of Hermione/Snape. It was interesting to say the least. I did nejoy your description of the church, but some of your words were a little off so if you ever go back and edit just keep a heads up for that ^_^. I liked your description of the crucifix. How odd to find Snape in a church, eh? Was there a specific reason you chose a church as the setting? This had a very enjoyable flow to it and I enjoyed it (especially as my first Hr/S ^_-) 8/10. I must agree though, description is certainly a strength of yours ^_^.Author's Response: Hey you! Thanks so much for your review, especially since I love your work.
As a fan of HG/SS, I welcome you to this twisted ship. Don't we all love shamelessly un-canon fics?
There isn't really any specific reason as to why I chose a church for the setting. For me, it's usually the setting that pops into my head first, and then the plot. I always have very image-driven plotlines, so it was the middle of last summer, and I thought that dark, twisty Snape would go great with an old church in the dead of winter.
Thanks again! =) Report Review
hey i'm rosyn anwylaeth from the forums, i said i'd review you so here i it is.
well wow that was quite amazing. i love your desciption of the church it was amazing. your whole style of writing is great, you write very well. the whole idea of the story although a little OC was very amazing. i liked how snape asked why she had died and he hadn't.
this is a very well writen fanfiction it's really good. i really enjoyed reading it.
rosie :PAuthor's Response: Thanks so much! Report Review
Brilliant! absolutely brilliant!
10/10Author's Response: Why, thank you very much! Report Review
I really enjoyed this, thanks for asking me to review it! Your writing style suits this subject perfectly. You build a mood and tension brilliantly, which is no mean feat in a one-shot. You really delve into the emotion behind what's going on, something which you really don't see enough in fanfic. You've captured Snape's character well, the fear of losing control, self-deprecation and bitterness behind what he was feeling.
I really loved this. Well done.
Jessica xxx Author's Response: Thanks so much for the detailed review! Report Review
Oh my gosh I cried.
That's all I'm gonna say.Author's Response: Yay! I moved someone to tears! Report Review
i liked it tho. Report Review
Wow... great one shot dear. ~~juls Report Review
...hm... First off, i loved your writing style. You're very fluid when it comes to writing, and it feels easy going. My only problem. I did find the whole Snape lusting after little under age Hermione just a teensy bit creepy. Don't get me wrong it was really well written and it was really good! It just sort have reminded me of the movie "American Beauty" with the father and all.i just find that stuff weird. Well i loved it anyways, it was great, kind of poignant, you know. Well.tis all i can say! Have a lovely evening, maybe you shall see my name again in a review, no? Ciao then. Report Review
Brilliant. I loved it. Well written, and well plotted!
-Bradi Report Review
Wow. That was amazing. Amazing. The detail was amazing, the characters were amazing. The plot was amazing. I am... amazed. This was truly a great fanfiction. It should definitely have more reviews. I would review this a hundred times if I could.
I think that the grammar was right on for the most part, and the characters were in character. The detail was excellent, and the ending was sweet. Great job!Author's Response: Thank you so much for your positively glowing review! I'll be sure to return the favor. =) Report Review
This story made me want to cry! You are an amazing author. Your descriptions are incredible and your characterizations fit just as I imagine the characters while adding depth to what we already know. It was beautiful and sad, and though I don't know normally like angst I enjoyed this immensely.Author's Response: Oh, I'm sorry I made you want to cry! It's always good to hear how a story made the reader feel, though. That's pretty essential to our work as authors. Thanks so much for your awesome review! =) Report Review
That was beautifully written and poetic. If you aren't secretly a published author, you probably will be one day. I don't think I'd have changed anything really, because the overall effect was stunning. 10/10.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Although it is my dream, I am not a payed author, haha. Report Review
OMG! That was amazing! That story was so good, I can't wait to see more from you, very good style of writing, interesting pairing, absolutley brilliant! 10/10Author's Response: Thanks so much! I can't believe I'm "OMG"-inducing. Report Review
First off, I loved it, absolutely loved it.
Your writing style is almost poetic, and it is slightly hypnotizing to read. I love it. You first paragraph was an amazing, descirptive poem in itself. All the descriptions in the very beginning were a perfect way to reel the reader in. Your descriptions of both Snape's and Dumbledore's feelings and thoughts were very welld one as well.
I must applaud you. You are one of the only people whose story I read kept Snape COMPLETELY in character, but in love as well. It was wonderful. You added just the right mix of spite, and anger at Hermione for throwing her life away for nothing, with guilt and loss. You wrote him as perfectly as anyone short of JK herself could write him, and he is such a difficult character to write.
The only thing I have to add is the the ending may have been a teeenyy bit rushed. I think you might have been able to draw out that ending scene where Snape is alone a little bit more before you dropped the "L" bomb. haha
But other than that, this story was overwhelming beautiful. And I really, really love your style. I will probably be reading other writings of yours, so, please keep up the good work. You get a 10/10 and I almost never give that out. =]Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's honest, constructive reviews like yours that keep me going. Report Review
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