i like it...but what i didnt like was this "Our main character" it sounds too...fake...i dont know other than that i really like it! choppy though all the scence changes makes it sound choppy! just some constructive critsim...i hate when people cant take criticism!!
-Lyra Report Review
do not go on? honey there is nothing to go on to. get some more chapters and i'm suggesting femmeslashAuthor's Response: Can you explain how there is nothing to go on to? And this isn't a one-shot. There will be more chapters. And I'll decide what kind of slash to do, if I want to do any slash at all. Report Review
Its sucks....nah I'm only joking. I really like the fact that it is graphic; it gives it a sense of realism. I thought it was a good start. Please review my story "Another Day, A Different Way". Report Review
omg keep writing i have to find out what happenes Report Review
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