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Manicured rows of WHAT exactly. You don't state what's manicured and in rows.
You spelt shakey wrong.
When you say her voice "choked" slightly, do you mean cracked? How does a voice choke? A person chokes. A dog chokes. Voices don't choke.
Um, what happened to her family? Why are they dead? And it would have been helpful if, when you described the graveyard, you had mentioned trees. Because otherwise, when the stalker-guy appears, it's like, your character is retarded and didn't notice a ''dark'' man just randomly standing behind her family's gravestone. I believe that would be kind of hard to miss.
It's also a very short chapter. You should have made it longer.
I'm also not quite sure where this is going ... ? What does her singing and conjuring guitars have to do with it? Well .. with what?
Just a few thoughts.
Hope they were helpful and insightful.
Wo... Well, first things first. MY NAME. GRACE. Lol. Psst, Good choice of name :D Secondly, that was amazing! Almost made me cry :( It felt as if you were actually there. Nooo Depressimg beginnings are good (I THINK) :) Keep it up! Can't wait for the next chapter! Report Review
Longer chapter is the only thing that I need suggest. Besides that, it was excellent. Report Review
Please add another chapter! Please! Please! Please! Please! Please! lol.Author's Response: The next chapter is waiting to be validated! I promise! :) Report Review
ooooooh! so sweet, and soooo sad! luv it, please keep going! Report Review
It was a good beginning, hope to read the next one soon :) Report Review
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEK KEEP GOING I LOVE IT!! Report Review
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