You have a very nice start here; there is a lot of potential for this story and it's characters. Just be sure to give your characters and your writing the time it deserves. I think these characters have the potential to develop beautifully, but take your time doing so. But, as an opening chapter, this does exactly what it should. It sets the scene and introduces the characters well! Keep writing! Report Review
Love how you keep the family traits going here. I'm just curious, though, as to who Ron marries. Hopefully I'll find out! Please update! Report Review
It's good but what you need is more, then it will attract more readers and more reviews. By-the-way, I just wanted to say thank you so much for reviewing my story. You've been really faithful and really nice, so yeah . . . thanks. xxAuthor's Response: Thank you for the info. And I love your storys as well. Report Review
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