First off, I love this story. I'm sorry that I haven't left you a review, but I just didn't know what to say. Why did I not know what to say? Because your story is totally genius!
The small mistakes in your writing are common among authors of a country where English is spoken but is not an official language or where most aren’t fluent.
My mother is a bit of a grammar, spelling, and punctuation freak; naturally it rubbed off on me too. So, as much as it kills me I must do this. Some of the words in here are easily confused in the English language. I've noticed you've made the common mistakes, nothing horrible though. However, may I recommend typing it in Microsoft Word and letting it edit it? Also, search the forums for a beta, they can work wonders for a story. Microsoft and a beta can lengthen your time between getting the story written and getting it up. However, I've noticed that proper grammar/spelling/punctuation helps get you noticed, that's right! You're more likely to become a trusted author!
The plot line doesn't need a thing. Well, maybe some oil or butter (foundation grammar work).
Well, I hope you didn't find this too harsh. I'm only trying to help, you can take my pre-heated (I use it) advice and warm it up (take the advice and use it) or you can just burn it and set off the smoke alarms (take it and dump it in the trash).
P.S. My analogies at the end have nothing to do with your story. I promise. Grammar will not make a story burn and set the smoke alarms off! I promise I wasn't insulting your story! Report Review
ah! how could u just leave off there.no, how could u anyway i give u a 10 Report Review
dude, what does 'mione's prophecy say???
please uppdate and harry should haveapparated with her.
itwas a good story
WOW!!!! itz soo good!!!!!!!!!!! please update soon, i really wanna know what happenes!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Report Review
i meant to ask this in my last review, what is her prophecy, or am i going to find out later? keep writing!!!!!!!! I love the book, itz such a good idea!!!!!!! ur a really good wirter, and keep it up!!!!!!!Author's Response: Yes, you are going to find out later what her prophecy is about and what lies ahead... thanks for the kind review! I will update as soon as possible! Report Review
Itz really good, i cant wait to read more!!!!!!!!!! Report Review
COOLNESS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i love it, keep typing!!!!!!!!!!! Report Review
wow! itz so cool, i like the dream, and the channge in hermionie, itz so good!!!!!!!!!!!! Report Review
wow, great story!!!!!!!!!! keep typing, im loving it soooo muchAuthor's Response: Thanks! I will indead! Report Review
Hey, it's me. I just didn't feel like loggin' in. Anyway, I still like this story. I felt bad for Draco being punished, but it was expected. Pretty cool that Hermione wrote her own Dark Arts book. Also, I don't mind the small typos. I've read wrose. Great story ;) Report Review
Omg, I sooo love your story... Please please update soon... This is soo going on my fav list... I can't wait to read what the others think about this... when Hermione just shows up.. great chapter.... 10/10
~!~Lana~!` Report Review
It's pretty good write more!! Report Review
good!!!!!!!! keep going!!!!!!!!!!!! Report Review
pleasae updateAuthor's Response: I'll try to post next Wensday, and plz don't forget to r&r my other fic, Together we can... in a web of lies when it is updated! Report Review
i like it so so much. keep writing
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I posted a new chapter, but for an new fic. plz r&r that one too! Report Review
really good!!!!!!!!! keep going!!!!!!!!!!!!Author's Response: Thanks for the kind review! My 6th chapter was already posted last Wensday, so it will be ready on the 30th. Report Review
this is one of the best storys i have ever read! CONGRATS!! x x x samiie .. keep updating x x x Report Review
im sorry, but this is not a good story, it is so confusing and has too many typosAuthor's Response: Well. too bad for you!!! I don't care one bit if you don't like this story. I'm not going to change it if that's what you want. So just shut up and go away!!! Report Review
the "chamelon charm" is actually the Disillusionment Charm (read book 5)
malfoy is already a death eater.
Was it to do with her prophecy? and What did they want to do with her? please make this more clear.
i will keep reading, but this is not a very good storyAuthor's Response: Are you the one writing the story here? I guess not!!! In my fanfic, Malfoy was forced to try and kill Dumbledore but couldn't so they kept him prisioner. Hello? Aren't you reading? Your going to learn later what they want to do with her, but I advise you to stop reading if you don't like this story. And don't give me any more reviews! Report Review
i can say this until im blue in the face: watch your typos! i caught 8 typos in this chapter. it was longeer than the last, but still a little short. and the plot is going very slow. try putting a little less detail in it, that will help. and how did hermione's hair become black! and since when did she love dumbledore so much, and why does she think she could have saved him. harry should be te one having these thoughtsAuthor's Response: Well, then your going to turn purple!!! I don't care if I have typos!!! I'm doing the best I can, and if that's not good enough, then move on and crush somebody's elses heart, will you? I can make the plot go as slow as I like and if you don't shut up, I'll put much more detail in it!!! Report Review
i like the dream, you have some typos, itz kinda short, and i like your title, but plz try to make your chapters a little longerAuthor's Response: What ever! Report Review
itz kinda short, but i like the change you describe in hermione, very ingenous Report Review
Awwwww it's so sweet please I beg of you to write more! Report Review
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