ok, so this was a total chance reading. I was looking at the beta topic link on the forums, and your story caught my eye 'cause it had Oliver and post hogwarts :) I'm thinking of making one myself, and clicked on it, and here I am, 1am prolly about the same time Page just had her test from her insane captain, and absolutely loving it. Now, I understand it's been about 4 years since you've updated, but it is honestly the best Oliver I've ever read. The Oliver I'm trying to write is pretty much right here, it's a very different story I have in mind, but I'm glad to have this kind of point of view of him, I think it will really help. So, I'll go to sleep dreaming of another chapter someday, but I'll definitely be continuing the same kind of spirit as this Oliver. I'll totally give you credit as well :D
lovely awesome job. Thank you! Report Review
So, you haven't updated in over 3 years.
I think you should. Please? (: Report Review
No! Why did that have to be in the contract! ): I love this story! I think it's been abandoned, though, which is depressing ): Report Review
WHEN will you update? I have waited and waited. Please put me out of my misery. Report Review
Oh My gods, GOds, gods, gods, gods, gods. I am going crazy, very crazy, and you my friend (yes!) are making me go insane. The way you wrote this, was amazing. I was shivering. I almost cried, the emotions were so raw. I practically felt Page's pain. Like, HOLY FRIKKEN AMAZING. please, update soon. Like? Now. Please?
I'd love you forever. But i already love this story, so i love love love love this. It's so amazing. My new like favorite story on this site. I've read a lot of stories on this site, i have over 800 reviews that i have reviewed for people and this by far is one of my favorites. Amazing! Report Review
uhoh. I'm all for Page and Oliver dating without dear old Philbert knowing! haha. I would be scared of death going to his officetoo.
So, oh my gods, i frikken love this. I will be so sad when i finish the next chapter?
How often do you update?
Please update like soon?
this is amazing!
Like, i can't stop smiling, and laughing, and Page is written so well and Oliver, gods can i marry him?
This is wonderful! I think you definitely have so much potential to actually publish one of your origional works one day! Work to it! Report Review
gods, (haha, starting off a review like you start off your chapters? Doesn't that make you feel peachy?!) This story is amazing. Like I'm already in love. I'm going to get through the first five chapters tonight. Then i'll be hoping, no i will be frikken praying for an update!
I absolutely love this.
You are amazing at writing this.
SO SO SO GOOD
your Oliver, makes me want to marry him! Report Review
Very interesting, the characters are great and it makes a change from the usual Oliver/Oc's where wood is a total prick! So what's Page going to do now that her romance is forbidden?
Update soon, I'm hooked! Report Review
Are you ever going to finish tis story? 'Cause I have waited and waited like forever for this story to be finished! I really liked and see the end of this so hurry up and finish it!!! Report Review
wow. i love this story. i actually found it in the Oliver/OC forums and i am very glad i did. the plot is brilliant and the characters are so believable. the torturing moments with Oliver remind me of a book i read; they make you take a breath and think 'is she going to break the rules?' and then she doesn't. good suspense. i think Knox is an amazing character even if i really don't like him. i can't wait for the next chapter so keep writing and update soon!
Dilys :) Report Review
wow, this is such a good story! please update, i'll check back soon! very good plot, and page is great! Report Review
I love this story!!! Please please update soon! Report Review
Oh, i think something's gonna happen to Arnie! or am I just thinking too much?Author's Response: lol. I suppose you really never know...
Thank you for the review! Report Review
Omg that was amazing! it had me on the edge of my seat(well more like my bed) at the night 'proving your-self' thing. i didnt really understand why oliver came with page though... is it just becuase she asked him to be there for her or because knox told him to show up? other than that i say it was amazing! keep it coming!Author's Response: Thank you! Now, I haven't read my own story in the longest time, but I do believe it is the fourth chapter when Knox tells her to bring Oliver. I think he would also like to support his best friend as well, though.
I'll try to get some writing done soon; I didn't anticipate becoming a validater - hard work! Thanks again! Report Review
this story is amazing. I see that you haven't updated in a while, so i ask, please hurry? This is so going on my favorites list. :D happy writing
~KristieAuthor's Response: I'm glad you've enjoyed this. I am trying to get around to it; though I hadn't anticipated becoming a validator and that has kept me quite busy the last month. I'm opening my word processor as I type. Thank you for the review! Report Review
Yay for awkward moments! I've read a fair few Oliver/OC's, but this is one of the best. I like the fact that it's not written at Hogwarts and you've not made Page be a Seeker and replace someone and make it AU. This is entirely plausible. In the Potterverse, that is.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yes, I really like to stay canon so it would have irked me to kick out a player at Hogwarts for her. Thanks again! Report Review
First of all, I love that this story isn't set in Hogwarts; I thought I was the only one writing an Oliver/Oc fic when he was on Puddlemire!
Your writing is awesome. They way you described the 'challenge' was really plausible and I felt like I was right there, working with Page. The sexual tension is palpable, mostly because you've already stated that Page likes Oliver and that team relationships are forbidden. Nice set up!
Can't wait for the next chapter!Author's Response: Yay for Puddlemere! Now I'll have to check out that story of yours soon.
I'm glad you liked the description and the tension. Thanks so much! I'll try to update once my exams are over. Report Review
Wow this story is so different to other OC/canon ones, mainly because I've never read an Oliver/OC one.
But even though it is unique Oliver is very canon fitting.
Awaiting the next chapter,
xx alexaAuthor's Response: Ah, well than welcome to the pairing! I'm glad you think my Oliver was in character. Thanks much, and I'll try to update soon. Report Review
WOW, what a great story.
Update soon!Author's Response: Thanks! I'll try. Report Review
Please, don't abandone this one! It's too good! ;)Author's Response: Don't worry, I wont! I'm caught in dreaded writer's block right now, but I'm hoping to have it out of the way soon. Thanks! Report Review
i really like this chapter, even if something page said isn't really something you usually think. one thing is proving yourself, one thing is abuse, i agree with oliver on this one. i'm pretty sure (or pretty hopeful, if you like) that this is gonna be a oliver/page in the end. it's just...i don't really see how, with the stupid rules and all that. they're absurd!!
anyway, please update soon, i'll be waiting!
GBAuthor's Response: Well, Page is an interesting person... And I think you're in store for some great surprises (at least I think they're good). I probably would have worked on a good portion of it this week since I was light in homework but I got grounded from my computer. Sorry. :-(
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Love this chapter! You really made me want to give Knox a good beating, yet I love how you characterize him. Page is really growing on me as well, the way she saw the torture Knox put her through as a good test amazed me. The description was brilliant, and I love the little moment between Page and Oliver and how she was restraining herself not to think about him that way. Poor girl, I hope things will look up for her soon. ^_^ Can’t wait to read the next chapter!Author's Response: I think you're the first person to like Knox's characterization. I just LOVE writing him and everyone's like "I want to hurt him!" I suppose that says something good about me though. lol. Yay! Thank you! Report Review
gah when are you going to update I've been waiting.:)Author's Response: I'm sorry. Not only am I distraught because I've lost my LIOtP folder with the next few handwritten chapters that I can't recreate because they're like 6000 wds each and with details I had for a specific reason, but I've also spent the last two weeks working on an original story for a magazine. If they accept it I get money and I like that idea. lol. Once I send it you'll have me back.
I'll search my entire house, I promise. I'll try my best!! :) Report Review
This is a GREAT story!!! I love it.
Awww forbidden love- it's great isn't it!
Omg I just love Oliver stories noww.
This story has a really great plot and I can't wait to see where it goes :]Author's Response: Thanks so much! Yeah, Oliver rules. I'll try to update soon. Report Review
I have returned! I've been awful with reviewing over the past few months. But I should be back, so I'll be hoping for updates. Anyway, here I go.
First thing that I noticed was that you were missing a comma after the first word.
A good while when you want to tell everyone who speaks to you to just hurry up and die?
I found that a little confusing, too...
Haha. I love her acknowledgment of her craziness. I am completely off my rocker. Love it.
“Merlin Page,” There's a comma missing there, too. You're actually missing beaucoup de commas. :\
Hehe. I love Eddie. He's quite the character. That's the problem with leaving the reviewing world for such a long time. You come back to the stories that you're in the middle of, and you can't remember anything. Lame, really.
Good Lord, that is a heckuva practice! Hahahaha. "mauled by a yeti" I love it. There are so many little things in here that just make me giggle hysterically. I'm sorry for the obnoxiously long review. I'm just commenting as I read.
Wow. The words I would like to use to describe Knox are not allowed in reviews. Ugh. But, anyway, I can see how your beta would have thought that this was the end. To be honest, it would have been a beautiful and totally unexpected end-- the whole bittersweet thing.
Either way, I'd like to see where you're going to take this, so update soon! ;)Author's Response: I have an ongoing war with commas. Either too many or two little. Haha.
It's my fault for not updating so much. Right now it's mostly because I'm paralyzed without my notes that have mysteriously relocated without a trace. And that's a problem because I had like the next two fully written chapters and I cannot redo it. Ugh.
Not obnoxious. I love long reviews!! Yeah, most stuff I write is serious so when I write this it slips in sometimes but that's real life right? Funny, everything I write is serious or angsty or something but this fic is like closest to how I am in real life. Like I'm pretty quirky and I suppose I'm funny - just generally optimistic - and yet this is the only thing I show it in really. lol.
I have to go find my folder. I'm beginning to freak out. Thanks so much! Report Review
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