Hey! Good job so far. I look forward to reading more!

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This was a great first chapter but GET TO THE WRITING!!

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That's pretty good. The detail was choppy though, and could use work. I didn't feel as though the story flowed all that well. Not to be forward or anything, but this story could definately use a brush up. Other than that, this is a pretty good idea so far, and you should keep writing. Overall I'd give you a 6/10. Sorry, but I have to be honest with you.

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Author's Response: Thank you for your honesty, and reveiw. I will try to make it better!

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hen, pen, den, wren? um...im clueless...i am one of your favourite authors apparently...so i decided to read and reveiw on your stories! I love the way i'm in the story...kind of...very clever!

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Hey I thought your 1st chapter was good for a beginner LOL!

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Hmmm, you didn't spell your title right. Just wanted to point that out. While I think this is an interesting point of view for a story, you didn't give us much backstory and it isn't intirely believable. I mean, the other students in the school would know if Malfoy had a sister, since the Malfoy name is so well-known. It's also a little hard to follow with the letters. You might want to put them in bold or italic so that the reader can tell the difference. I think you have a good start, you just need to fill it out a little better. Using more description within the dialouge really helps a reader tell who is speaking. I hope you continue on with this story. Please don't be offended by this review, I just want to help. You have a great story, build on it!

Author's Response: THank you very much... I'm going to change it though so Linda is behind it all with Draco, so I am not offended by you review, I am quite thankful 'cause your the only one who reviewed me, so THANK YOU VERY BERY MUCH!!!!!!

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