I think this is a great start to the story! Personally,a twisted stomach is actually true for how I feel about my crush, so kudos for real life (so many authors are unrealistic)

One note; Draco's a prefect. In the movie they don't bother mentioning it, but in the book he's all happy and bullying firsties, so you actually might need to revise this chapter a little bit (or you could be O.C, that works too)
I rally like it; more more more please!

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Great begining. I hope you keep it going!

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i like how you began everything in the very beginning, but i think it's slightly rushed. calm things down a bit. we don't really get to see draco's inner feelings about hermione, and perhaps you could extend the dream in the beginning a little bit so that we could understand better. their little encounter was cute, i must say ;) keep up with the writing!

Author's Response: Thanks! I really appreciate you reading my fanfiction, it's my first one so I'm not quite certain about everything yet. Thanks for the great advice though. Chapter 1 was only an introduction and I plan to make chapter 2 a bit longer and less rushed. I agree on you with that, it all went a bit quickly. I hope to write more about Draco's feelings in the coming chapters! :) I hope you will keep reading it!

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that was good update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you! ^^ I will begin with chapter 2 tomorrow and I will hopefully have it finished by Monday but that is if all goes well. Which I hope it will! :P

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