Sorry to point this out, but you have Ron saying that they've known for three weeks, then Hermione says three months - just thought you might want to change that.
Otherwise, good chapter.

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cute! i like how simple and imaginative it was! it's very sweet, and i love how you talked about Harry being willing to do anything to give Ginny her dreams!

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its an awsome story but u have a loop hole it says that she knew for about three weeks and when ginny asked how long ago did she known for three months

Author's Response: thanks for telling me.....I guess I missed that part.....lol

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bluegirl covered it all.

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OOOH! NICE! So when are you gonna make Ginny pregnant?


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I absolutely LOVED this one! Great!

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Vewwy Vewwy Nice! Is that the end or is there more? There better be more!

-peace out my gangsta homies


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Like I said in my last review, you have a good concept going, just add some detail. You improved by putting the story into paragraphs, but you need to seperate it after a section of the story is completed or if someone else is talking. Also, remember to put quotes when the speaker is speaking. For the last sentence, it should be "Yes, I'm ready," she whispered.
Keep writing and I hope all this advice helped you!
-britt

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The story has a good concept to it, it just needs more description. Also, your sentence a little blunt. Add more detail to what is happening. How did the cottage look? How did they both feel? How was the ride there? Add a little more description and put your sentences in to paragraphs and you're golden.

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soooo sweet , write more soon

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This was asome i can not wait for the next one

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This is cute. I like it!

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hmmmmmm um it was ok. not bad though but not great i think the word im looking for is good. yes it was good

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this story is so good i can not wait for the next one

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