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Ok, where shall I begin. First for critiques I must admit she is extremely mary-sue so far! (pm me if ur not sure what I mean) And there are a few words missing here and there, confusing sentence grammer... (Ex. The nexs artcile (thats what I was guessing it was) needs to be in italics and indented at the top, and maybe labeled? (just a suggestion)

But I also would like to say I love your writing style and sense of description. Though I'm pretty sure I know who the cliff-hanger was, I cant wait for the next chapter. Keep going!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I tried to put it in italics but i couldn't work out how to do it. I'll keep in mind what you said.

Thanks again Simone
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MARY JANE!!!! Haha, princess huh. Very interesting. I think you should descibe her in the next chapter. Hey, you do have a good story! And you also can right really well! PM me when your next chapter is validated! I think this could go far!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review I'll make sure to PM you when the next oart is up.

Thanks again, Simone
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