It's a very sweet, simple story. It's great, but you may want to expand on some descriptions or dialogs to make it more unique. Also, some proof reading would be good, watch the caps I s especially. Good work! keep on writing ;)

Author's Response: wow i havnt even looked at these things in forever. but yeah i was going to completly change the whole story and make it into a short story with like 5 chapters but i never did. thanks for the review, it was my first ever story.

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thats really cool. too bad its a one-shot. who's picture have u gotin your banner for lily

Author's Response: Actually, I really don't like this story. I'm in the process of changing it into a short story, but it's going really slow. I have major writers block. I used Isla Fischer for Lily. Thank you so much for all of your reviews!

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this is cool,I love sappy l/j fics! Its strange, I just clicked on it because the girl in the banner looks exactly like me except I have browner hair. Who is she by the way?

Author's Response: I'm really suprised you liked this, I am so embarassed by it. When I get the time, I'm planning on re-writting this and making it into a short story. I actually can't remember who she is, it's on the tip of my toung, but I just can't think of her name, sorry.

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you did just fine. it is a cute, sweet story. well done. :)

Author's Response: thank you!

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Interesting idea. Cute story. Watch your grammar/ spelling.

Author's Response: thanx. im getting the hang of it! keep reading!

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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! how sweet!

Author's Response: thank you! thats how most peolple respond to this story. keep; readinkg!

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Great!

Author's Response: thank you!

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i love this its so funky in a good way!!

Author's Response: thank you! keep reading!

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EEE IT GOT VALIDATED!!!!! 10, obviously! Inspiration does come from the oddest places, doesn't it?
Hugs, Al

Author's Response: i no. uj scared me! i only read like the first sentance and i was like who is this? and then i saw it was you. thanx

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thats so sweet and simple
i love the context you put it in
bravo!
~Fleur

Author's Response: thank you! i'm so glad you liked it! keep reading!

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