well poor narcissa will have it hard...Author's Response: Indeed. Thanks for the review! Report Review
i am not to picky i love this story and keep up with the good work
(write more chapters please)Author's Response: Thanks, and I will! Report Review
I really like this one! Please keep writing chapters!Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
hey, new reader here. i just read through all the chapters and i LOVE it! its nice to see a story where the characters arent so well known... i dont know how to explain it. i mean we dont know alot about Narcissa so its nice to see her side of the story.
keep up the amazing work!!!
LexAuthor's Response: Thanks! I'm glad to see you like stories about some of my favorite characters! Report Review
its great i love it! keep on writingAuthor's Response: Thanks! Report Review
Aw, that's kind of sweet, I suppose. I mean, considering the circumstances, it really sucks for Narcissa, but you wrote it very well and birth is alway a happy topic. Anyway, I'm happy to see the update, and I look forward to reading more soon. 10/10
DiandraAuthor's Response: Thanks! I'm trying to equally update, but I will hopefully have another chapter by the beginning of January. Thanks for the review! Report Review
It's birth control, isn't it? Or something along those lines, I'm guessing. Anyhow; I was SO excited to see that this had been updated; we've been waiting for quite a while! I love that Lucius completely controls her life, she's not even allowed to go out when she wants. As you know, I really like this story and can't wait for it to continue. Great job!
DiandraAuthor's Response: Thanks! You've guessed right. I just like to keep the readers guessing. I'm on a bit of an updating spree, so hopefully I'l be able to do a bit more before marching band takes over my life in November. Again, thanks for the review! Report Review
Hmm... another brilliant chapter. I can't seem to get enough of your story. I love how she confronts him while he's "working". I am a bit confused about the potion that she's taking. Was it to find out about Lucius' Death Eaterness? Maybe it was for a different reason that we don't yet know of. Please update soon after the hiatus is over. I'm really anxious to find out what's going on. Great job!
DiandraAuthor's Response: Thanks! I realize that the potion is a bit confusing, but in the next chapter you find out what happens when she doesn't take the potion. Thanks for sticking with all the stories! Report Review
i love this story. keep up the good work!Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
love it!!!Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
Haha, that's great! A conspericy against Lucius, very good indeed! I love his attitude towards her, he's such a git! I loved this chapter, it's another really amazing one. Please update soon, I was so happy when I saw that you finally had!
DiandraAuthor's Response: Thank you! I had some problems with validation getting mixed up, and then I was away on vacation, and it was all just crazy. But chapter 8 is waiting, and validation is currently only 5 days. Thanks for all your support of the story! Report Review
Great job! This chapter, along with "War of the Roses" are my favorites--very well thought out. I always have trouble with dialog for Lucius, especially when writing him as a younger person--but your example is quite inspiring!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I liked War of the Roses too - it was fun to write. So was chapter 8, but it's not quite validated yet. I didn't think you had any problems with Lucius in your story, which was fantastic, by the way. Thanks for all the positive feedback and the review! Report Review
This is quite interesting. I'm really enjoying the story. The only thing that could be considered a 'problem' is the odd spacing, but that doesn't bother me. Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, I am having a few problems with that - forgetting to make the spaces even and all that. Thanks for the review! Report Review
and then??? you can't leave us like this!! please update!!!wonderful story! compliments!Author's Response: All will be answered soon... basically, in eight more days. Once school ends, I'm going to start writing again. Just a little bit of patience! Report Review
I really love that she hates him so much. This is really quite good, please continue :DAuthor's Response: Thanks! Chapter 7 should be validated some time today or tomorrow! Report Review
This is realy realy amazing! I can't get enough, so pretty please update soon! I'm very excited to see what you come up with next! Thanks again, I've given all of your chapters 10/10's, though they deserved 10/10!
DiandraAuthor's Response: Thanks again! Report Review
This is so sad...in a good way of course! I realy like it, especially the vows. It was creative for you to make hers "to follow and *obey*" as if he would be commanding her! How awful. This is really well written, and now time for the next chapter!
DiandraAuthor's Response: Thanks! I originally had about 600 words for this section, but I erased it all and rewrote it like this. Report Review
Oh wow, I definitely was not expecting that! This is a wonderful story, as I said before and I'm very glad that you have updated! You've done a great job with it, and I like the refrences to her "plastered on smile" as in Narcissa is never really happy. It makes the story much more interesting! Now, since I have been oblivious to the updates, I will go on and read your next chapters (yay!).
DiandraAuthor's Response: Thank you! Report Review
WOW! This is really good, I'm very excited to read the rest of it...please update soon! Wonderful work, this is just how I imagined them being as Hogwarts students, I really like this story! Thanks,
DiandraAuthor's Response: No, thank you! The story existed previously up until chapter 5, but it was a ToS violation, so it was deleted and is being rewritten and reposted between my other stories. So, thanks for the new positive feedback! Report Review
This is a wonderful story. A ton more details and if you fix the many spacing, you could have yourself a wonderdous fanfic.
-NaoAuthor's Response: Thanks, I think. I believe the prologue to be rather sufficiently detailed. I put more detail into one-shots anyway.
Um, spacing? Where does that come from? Report Review
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