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Review #1, by Lunicle Deceptive Honesty

26th October 2008:
Wow, I like this chapter even better than the first! I think that is probably because your OC is quite amusing. I like her spunk. Huzzah for tough female heroines!

I have one nitpick again. "When she finally found the compartment that Malfoy was in she stopped and watched him talk with Crabbe, Goyle and Zambini."

You repeatedly referred to this person as Zambini- I'm pretty sure you mean Blaise Zabini.

That's it though. :D

Anyway, I really, really enjoyed Kennedy. Besides how interesting I think the plot sounds from reading the summary, the characters are interesting and well-characterised enough that I'd probably read about just random stuff in their (hypothetical) everyday lives. XD

Well done again! 10/10

Reviewers, unite! Writers, write!

-Luna-

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Review #2, by Lunicle How it Began

26th October 2008:
This start has completely sucked me in. I'm very interested to move onto the next chapter! However, since I liked it so much I felt compelled to leave a review before I allow myself to go and treat myself to reading more of it. :D

I like your characterisation of Draco A LOT. You didn't make him too fluffy and sweet, but you made him a bit more human than how he seems from archrival Harry's POV. So well done on that!

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Nitpick Section:

In canon, Death Eater(s) is generally capitalised.

Other than that, it was nicely edited. :D

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Anyway, great start to what seems like it'll be a great story!

10/10

Reviewers, unite! Writers, write!

-Luna-

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