i always love stories which start from the beginning of the marauders years, and this one looks like it will be great. please dont feel the need to rush through the story like so many people do, otherwise it becomes a little unbelievable. looking forward to reading more, in particular how you build peter as a character.Author's Response: I'll be going a bit slower than I would like, actually, seeing as I'm a bit busy. But thanks for commenting! I'm glad you enjoy the story! Report Review
Hey there! I like this beginning! If you keep up the good work, this is going to be a good story. I liked the part about: "It's two in the morning, son, we'll go later today." Nevertheless I discovered some mistakes and I thought I`d better tell you:
In the first line you wrote "own", I think you meant owl. In the letter you mixed up "list" with "last" and instead of "James`s" it`s always "James`".
And pretty much at the end, you wrote "At the end of the money" - I guess you wanted to write "month", right?
But that`s just been some stupid, little mistakes and I`ll keep an eye on this story. So keep up the good work and the chapters! :OD
Author's Response: Thanks for finding those small but significant errors! I'll go through and fix those when I get the time. I'll be working on the next part soon, and I may add more to what I have instead of making a new chapter!
Glad you're interested! Report Review
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