this was beautiful. again you have wonderful desciption. you make us feel everything we are supposed to and know exactly what we need to know but not too much. you stay to the point yet at the same time we feel we are there.
I especially liked this paragraph:
"He told me he loved me! He meant it! He must have! Did he get weak in the knees when we looked at each other, like I did? Does he feel like the world disappears when we kiss? Do his fears go away when we hold hands? Does he get butterflies in his stomach when we hug like I do? The memories of all the times when we walked around the grounds at night came back; it can’t just end like this I couldn't let it! I wouldn't!"
It was so beautiful it sounded like a song. Have you ever tried to write poems or songs? Poems don't have to ryhme and i'd say that you would write a lovely lovely poem. Afterall, poems deal with emotions and descripton so that would be perfect for you! Even if it isn't fan fiction or you can't publish it i think you should give it a shot!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you liked this! It's the first thing I ever wrote!!! I'm glad I sucked you into the story, make you feel how they feel, you don't know how happy that makes me feel!
I enjoyed writing that paragraph, but always felt it was too much...obviously you beg to differ!
I have attempted a few poems, never songs, and just to let you know, they've all sucked! And I'm not even kidding! I will try again though and try to get into it...make it symbolic and cryptic...I don't know...I'll try!!! Thank you!
You have made my day! Report Review
ii Reelii Liike Thiis..!
ii Normally Dont Liike These Song Storeez...Bt Thiis Onee Ish Good x]
iLy Author's Response: Thank you! I'm in the middly of writing another Break-up story...don't know if it's quite good enough to post yet tho! lol thanks for reviewing! Report Review
I just read your songfic and liked it a lot!
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So long... LupinsLoveAuthor's Response: that was amazing!!! love the banner!!! thanks so much!!! Report Review
I kno u from skool its elles i reely like ur story im txting u just now as well as emailing i cant believe u wrote this is super goodAuthor's Response: Hi ta! u really like it? i thought it was a bit soppy! Report Review
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