I have to say, you wrote it quite well. And kindly check this line "holding onto fell to the ground." it was a bit mixed up. All in all, job well done.
But I have to say hermione's character here, is a universe different form who she really is. She's like a push-over here.
You know, this was just a random story. But I'm glad I got yours :-).
Anyway, hopefully your freind is free fromthe clutches of her boyfriend.
Hoping to read more of your works :))
Anyway. Nice Job!
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You did a great job of making Ron a total git! You did a great job of describing Hermione's emotions: how she felt used, like a rag doll, dirty, etc. I especially liked the way you had Hermione free herself. Good job!Author's Response: oh thanks very much, i'm glad you liked my story. i think it's abit off though...well, i might do a revised version of this story. *scurries off to consider...* Report Review
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