Well, great songfic...the lyrics fit in well with the theme. I have to be honest by saying that there is room for improvement. I don't want to give you the wrong idea, I know I could not have written it better, I just want to point out a few things if that is okay?
1) The vocabulary is not in the same league as "Harry Potter and the Fight to Love"
2) I can imagine Ginny saying what she said, however I feel that Harry would maybe have done a bit more to get her back or something.
3) Spacing, (like all of the other points, this is a minor problem) I found some parts of this chapter hard to read due to the fact that it was a little bit squashed up!
Obviously you don't need to pay attention to my review, I was just trying to put my point across and sorry if I have offended you in any way!
~Cedrics_gurl~Author's Response: No you didn't offend me. That was one of my first pieces of writing and done a long time before "Fight to Love" so obviously I have improved since then. Thanks for reading and reviewing. Report Review
Aww that's so sad!
I Love it..
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it. Report Review
That was sad in my opinion!!! I liked it any way!!!!!Author's Response: lol yeah i cried when i wrote it but i love the song and kelly clarkson so i hasd to write it! thanks for reading and reviewing. Report Review
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