I stuck this story out in the hope that your writing style would improve. It did, but only slightly. Your plotline at times was incomprehensible and sloppy, most of what you wrote was immature and weakened by annoying americanisms like using 'freaking' in practically every sentence. I wish I could give you constructive criticism to help you improve your writing but the only constructive thing I can say is 'do us all a favour and STOP WRITING'.

Author's Response: First of all, I think you should take a moment to look at when this story was written. Secondly, now knowing that, I think you should go find a well and fall down it. And finally, when my novels are published, as they are coming quite close, I will remember you.

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Poor Lils.her parents are horrible to her

Author's Response: Mm, definitely. They get what's coming, though.

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finally lilys turning normal. but I'm confused. Is she going out with Malfoy?

Author's Response: Yes, she is. It's yucky. Thank you for reviewing!

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I seriously hate Lily like she is. Im so sorry but it isn't Lily at all.

Author's Response: Oh, trust me, I know. I'm not really sure what I was thinking when I wrote the beginning of this story. I hope you like the rest of it!

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Im sorry but I hate that Lily turned goth. Turn her back soon! arrrgh!

Author's Response: She will be soon, don't worry!

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Cool stuff, as always (:
I was just wondering, if you could tell me the Avril Lavigne comparison? Only, because it was already removed when i started reading your story, and i absolutely LOVE Avril. Anyways, thank you for putting this up!

Author's Response: I honestly don't even remember what the comparison was, it's been so long since I worked with this. Sorry.

Thank you for reading and reviewing!

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This is really great! I can't wait to read the other chapters and the other two stories.

Author's Response: Awh, thank you!

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Oh loved it
Although it was a bit unreal for Remusto cometo the ball andchange and for Them to give him apotion they haven't invented yet
But I loved this one

Author's Response: I know. I messed up quite a few things while writing this, so thank you for reading and reviewing! :D

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Godnessme Does Lily have a problem or what
This I think you exxagerated a little but its fine

Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing!

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Wow, I absolutely detest all of Lily's family.

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: Mm, as do I.

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Wait, isn't her mother dead? Didn't her father kill her mother? Whoa, I'm lost. That's the story I'm reading, right?

I'm way lost.

Author's Response: Okay, I knew I wasn't going crazy: "There was some terrible mistake the night you ran away. Your mother didn'€™t die. He killed Claris, his current girlfriend then, and made you think it was your mother. You ran away before anything could be clarified. I found your mother hiding at her friend'€™s house."
That's in the letter Lily gets from her aunt.

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I really hate the Slytherins.

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: As do I.
Thank you for reading!

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Intense. You manage to have tons happening in one chapter and still keep the story going.

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: Thank you!
I'm glad you're enjoying it still, :D

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Wow. Life sucks super bad right now for them.

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: Yea, pretty much.
Thank you for reading!

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How truly sad. Poor Sirius. I know he doesn't love them, but they're his family. They should love him.

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: I totally agree, and, to this day, I'm still mad that I put in a relationship of hate between him and Regulus, because I totally think they really did love each other, looking back.
Thank you for reading!

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I really detest Bellatrix, too. Admittedly, she's awesomely developed; she's a really intricate character and that kind of stuff is really cool to me. But I cannot stand her. I was disappointed she wasn't killed by Neville, too, who had the most reason to kill her. But Molly getting her was pretty awesome.

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: I think Bellatrix is an incredible character.
Rowling did such an amazing job with her.
That said, of course, I do just absolutely despise her, but, I mean, we're supposed to hate her, so it works.
And, reading it, I just thought Molly getting her was so awesome.
I was so excited.
Thank you!

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Whoa, wait. Did we already have Valentine's Day? Your chronology is super screwing with my head.

Author's Response: Beats me if I understood my chronology back then, either.
I'm sorry if things are horribly confusing.
Everything starts to make sense eventually, I promise.

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Oh, sad. It's suddenly getting very, very dark again.

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: Thank you for reading!

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Wait, I'm confused. Did Remus turn into a werewolf? If so, why didn't he know it would be a full moon? He's too careful to make a mistake like that.

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: Honestly.
I was just an idiot sometimes while writing this. I really don't know why this chapter happened the way it did. Sorry, :/
Thank you for still reading, though!

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Yay, friends! Hopefully for longer than... well, hardly anything.

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: Haha!
I can't remember correctly what happens in these chapters anymore, so I guess it'll be a surprise for both of us.
Thank you for reading!

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What is so wrong with those two? How come they've always got to yell at each other?

I really detest this Lily/Malfoy thing. I wanna gag every time I think of it.

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: Cos, secretly, Lily adores him and just can't accept it, and so she's going insane over it.
I think, :)
I did, too, trust me.

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What is going on in that damn girl's mind? Malfoy? She needs more help than I thought.

But I'm glad her hair was red again.

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: I know!
I was a little shocked when I started writing it.
Thank you for reading!

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I'm starting to wonder if this is going to be a screaming story... That's how they've seemed to express their feelings so far.

I liked James' freak-out. Made him seem like a normal seventeen-year-old boy again.

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: It tends to be so for quite some time, haha.
Lily has a hard time really opening herself up other than to be angry.
Thank you!

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Lily's overreaction made me... I dunno, not want to read. I perservered, and found I enjoyed the end of the chapter. But there's something so unnerving about this Lily. I hope she lets her hair be red again; there's something missing without it.

With that said, I find it impressive that you've managed to take such a creative spin on our couple. I'm too much of canon-stickler myself to do this, and how you're handling it is pretty cool. There's the underlying relationships we know of from the Harry Potter books, and there's most of what we do know about these characters... and there's something so unique. It's awesome.

Okay, enough rambling. To the next chapter!

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: Yea, I know what you mean.
Even writing it, I always felt a little weird, a little off, because it's such a far reach from what Lily normally is.

Thank you so, so, so much!
That's very kind of you, :)
I always get nervous when I see new reviews for this because I wrote it so long ago, and my style and actual writing has changed so drastically that I'm always afraid people will hate this.

I hope you enjoy it!

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Wow, what happened with her dad? From how she reacted, it seemed sudden. What's going on? I feel so confused...

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: I put a different spin on her family environment, as well.
Thank you for reading!

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